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Bloody Valentine

Author: star_on_fire22
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Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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well this is my valentine's day poem. i dont like it too much.. i feel very artistic the one day so i wrote two poems.. but neitehr really speak to me that well. but i thought i would post them just to see what anyone else thinks.

Bloody Valentine

I asked you out yesterday.
You just walked away and laughed.

I called you Last night.
You said you were busy.

I told you I loved you.
You stared at me in disgust.

Why can't you be mine?
Today is now Valentine's Day,
You are someone else's.
Tonight i will take my own life.
I can not bare the thought of you
Loving anyone but me.

Submitted on 2006-02-12 02:40:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is topical yet deep. A little disturbing and at the same time yearning. Poetry is the access we have to our subconsious mind. I liked the poem, but was truthfully disturbed by its content. There are millions out there, and i only wonder who has felt this same way. This write makes you wonder.
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