This is a very interesting poem. I like the narrative style you have used here. I found myself wondering what was going to happen but then found that not much of anything did. The ending here is very good and a really strong message too. We must all learn to find ourselves and love ourselves for who we are before we can truly love another. Self discovery is so important in our lives and in order to really share with someone, you must be complete yourself. A very good and thought provoking poem. Happy Valentines Day! Take care.
Hm.. I didnt like it at all. But its not because it was bad. It was good, and to the point. Like the too fast passing spring. But its because it s valentines day, and I just dumped my boyfriend. So, the whole Jane and Joe thing got kinda personal. I dont think I broke up with him because I dont know who I am, but rather that I am starting to realize who I am, and what I need.
But it was a good poem! Well written with long nice lines, without making it tiredsome to read. It was just the message that kinda annoyed me. But hey. Valentines day always make me moody!
That is awesome. I love everything about it. The long length of the lines adds to it, in my opinion, and the wording is great. I like how you used the names Joe and Jane to describe how they don't have much of an identity. Very creative. Great job
heartbreak and loneliness are rather ignored topics during valentines day- people tend to feel they have to do something, even if the relationship is gone. i like how jane and joe are just normal and undescribed enough to be anyone- and they seem to fit everyone at one time or another. you write really well- i could really see the two character in my mind... well, i think i'll stop my rambling now...but i like it -Vas
I do like this because I think that too many people believe that love will grant them identity. I think that Joe is right. We must know ourselves before we can know or love another. Most of us project a picture onto someone that we meet and love that picture or a mirror and love our own reflections. I think Joe and Jane will possibly find love, but not until they learn what it is. Lynn
I'm not sure I can describe why I like this. I mean It's good, written well and has the kind of story that makes me think, which is why I like reading your work a lot. Personally, it reminds me of a Joe Blowe whom I turned down for marriage, and his response was "There is no such thing as love and you will never find true happiness" and I told him that was exactly why I wouldn't marry him. He had started taking everything for granted and somewhere along the line - passion got lost and I was just convenience...and he lost his fizz.
Very nice Chrystine, sad - but too often reality Lisa
I liked the way you took us the reader through out each scene like a blow by blow of accounts. I felt your chose of words to creat imagery was on cue. I liked the easy flow of this, it gave me a chance to think as I read this. I was sad they did not hook up, but glad you advocated self love first in order to truly love. this was more of a realistic view of how love is between two people who do not know themselves or love themesleves. I think you did a fine job on this.