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    Author: Drea
    ASL Info:    18/f/nowhere
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 289/142/53
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Dreaded memories invade my head
    Only I know
    No can understand

    Misplaced anger
    Knowledge before my time

    Un-displayed emotions
    Cracking under pressure

    Emotional train wreck
    So many tears cried

    No one can understand.




    Submitted on 2006-02-12 20:08:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Are you bipolar drea jk jk jk bu there was alot of pain in this poem very good I like it no changes
    | Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by sober_x_smile | [ Reply to This ]
      it's good, sounds like when a bipolar person ''crashes''. it could flow better, though, it's a bit choppy or whatever. great concept!
    Johnny 5
    | Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by Johnny 5 | [ Reply to This ]
      its sounding a bit "chunky" to me. there needs to be more flow between the lines. find a way to connect all your thoughts. keep working on it. good start though
    | Posted on 2006-02-12 00:00:00 | by Roula | [ Reply to This ]
      honestly, i think it needs to be worked on. dont get me wrong it tis good it just needs more.or something is missing.i dont know what it needs.but keep writing.oh and BtW.someone out there understands.
    | Posted on 2006-02-12 00:00:00 | by LostInYerTears | [ Reply to This ]


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