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Author: Drea
ASL Info:    18/f/nowhere
Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 289 /142 /53
Words: 38
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Dreaded memories invade my head
Only I know
No can understand

Misplaced anger
Knowledge before my time

Un-displayed emotions
Cracking under pressure

Emotional train wreck
So many tears cried

No one can understand.

Submitted on 2006-02-12 20:08:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Are you bipolar drea jk jk jk bu there was alot of pain in this poem very good I like it no changes
| Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by sober_x_smile | [ Reply to This ]
  it's good, sounds like when a bipolar person ''crashes''. it could flow better, though, it's a bit choppy or whatever. great concept!
Johnny 5
| Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by Johnny 5 | [ Reply to This ]
  its sounding a bit "chunky" to me. there needs to be more flow between the lines. find a way to connect all your thoughts. keep working on it. good start though
| Posted on 2006-02-12 00:00:00 | by Roula | [ Reply to This ]
  honestly, i think it needs to be worked on. dont get me wrong it tis good it just needs more.or something is missing.i dont know what it needs.but keep writing.oh and BtW.someone out there understands.
| Posted on 2006-02-12 00:00:00 | by LostInYerTears | [ Reply to This ]

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