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    dots Submission Name: Special Memories #1dots
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    Author: C. Flava
    ASL Info:    19/M/ILLINOIS
    Elite Ratio:    4.75 - 87/117/28
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       I think this is kinda short but I haven't wrote anything in awhile so it's good in my book, hope you enjoy. 1 love


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    dotsSpecial Memories #1dots
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    Our Eyes are locked
    Our Hands are touching
    Our Hearts are beating
    Our Bodies are lusting
    For the long awaited
    Ectasy and Bliss
    This is how we felt
    When we had our first kiss.




    Submitted on 2006-02-12 22:30:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      There isn't much say here ... it was a nice little write which quite was also straightforward and simple. I know that we can't judge a poem just coz is short but I would've liked to see more description of that moment that at times gets to be so awkward.

    You had a good start though... let me know if you decide to make a re - write. Id really like to see one.

    Kind regards,

    Ethan.
    | Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by Ethan Brody | [ Reply to This ]
      Honesty is the best policy for me, so I have to tell you it's like one of those little cutesy rhymes that girls write when they have a crush on someone. Not necessarily a bad thing, but I'm just not sure you wanted it to go across as that. But that's what I got from it, and the meaning is pretty simply put in front of you.
    | Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by Sipthefallensky | [ Reply to This ]


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