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Author: darkness
ASL Info:    19/F/my own world
Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 524 /218 /40
Words: 123
Class/Type: Misc /I am dead inside
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the way ive been feeling for the past few weeks....
dead cliché
i dont like the hole i used to hav a story part its tooo commen
o well


untitled



I used to have a story
but it has long been forgotten
evenesing into the end

I had a heart
I think.....

Somewhere, in this time
long forgotten

I used to have dreams back then
I guess I did'nt hold on to them
tight enough
for they slipped right through my fingers
just as my sanity, dripped
slowly evaporating, under the sun

My Curiosity killed my soul...
NOW I wander aimlessly
back and forth
in the Land of the Doomed

My hope is lost
My thoughts are LOST
Alas! All is lost...

in bitterness i weep
let me sleep
let me sleep
let me sleep
forever
neverending

when time ends.....






Submitted on 2006-02-13 01:48:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Good read with alot of emotion, it lakcs construction, which isn't a bad thing.
| Posted on 2007-01-05 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]
  By the way, I really enjoyed this poem. Drum roll please . . . this goes straight to my favorites. h a h a h a h a h a ! It's adorable. It makes you seem more human. I believe that feeling human is a good thing. Everybody has their weaknesses. I LOVE IT !

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| Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by UnPerfect | [ Reply to This ]
  You hve a heart . . . you helped me get through so many tough times. All the word of wisdom you contributed towards me could not have been from one with no heart. You have one of the biggest hearts. Your hears is mad of g o l d !

Now + Forever ,
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| Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by UnPerfect | [ Reply to This ]
  this was great something a little different i alwaz like untitled pieces because you never no what its about before reading
thanx for your comments on the rampage series
i am glad you enjoy
thanx again
sandman
| Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
  the beging was so great i decided to just read it i love the way its write like ur asking ur self...i had a heart..once i think..that moved me alot ...its one of the best iv read in a long time good job!

Trevor...~
| Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by goomaster03 | [ Reply to This ]


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