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    dots Submission Name: Sexual Harrassmentdots
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    Author: LoneWolf
    ASL Info:    16/F/Earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.35 - 136/108/19
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
    Total Views: 932
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 681



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       i wrote this one for skool. it's my first sonnet, so it's not really good... read and enjoy! ^.^


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    dotsSexual Harrassmentdots
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    Friend of a friend, I met you here one night
    You came and went like a soft summer breeze
    We partied and danced, it all felt so right
    Together, I felt we could talk with ease

    Over the next few months our friendship grew
    I trusted you like an older brother
    And I used to think you felt like that too
    How should I know you wanted a lover?

    I tried to pull away, donít touch me there
    You cannot be trusted, I was so wrong
    This dirty feeling I will always bear
    The tainted memory is just too strong

    Sexual harassment is never fun
    I blamed myself, but youíre the guilty one




    Submitted on 2006-02-13 08:18:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It made me feel sad! Thanks for the great write!
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-10-17 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. That was kind of sad. This piece was good. i like how the end brings awareness about sexual harrasment, Its like its telling the readers that if it happends to them it isnt their fault, this is a lesson that is true in many subjects. Good job and if you ever wanna discuss things feel free to reach me.

    Saint Kairo
    | Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by Saint | [ Reply to This ]
      Unfortunately, most teenage boys are ALWAYS thinking in terms of sex while the girls seem to be more into the RELATIONSHIP. It's the genetic mis-match of hormone-peaks that human evolution hasn't corrected yet...lol

    I'd say unless the guy tried to FORCE something on you, try not to make a huge deal out of it...he's the one that should be embarrassed for making a move when you didn't want it...
    | Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]
      sometimes you just never know. well written and I'm not sure if it's in sonnet form since I've only tried to write one and it didn't come out too well! writing form poetry gives me a headache. but reading it is fun. I enjoyed this.
    | Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm sorry for you that it happened.
    Your poem was not bad if it was your first sonnet I think. The poem had not really a deep meaning, and it wasn't that original but the scheme was allright. The story was told a bit in short, but it's a sonnet so it couldn't be any longer but if it wasn't i'd say maybe a few more lines.
    DZ
    | Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by Darth Zeus | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this is a really honest piece. Like, it portays the emotions and experiences clearly honest. And it is exactly what a lot of harassed people feel when it happens. It was extemely thought provoking, and thats is awsome. Issue that have been sorta pushed under the rug like this one need to be thought about. No one can really predict when thats going to happen and the who shock of an experience like that was dipicted beautifully. Amazing work. -TC Wolfsong
    | Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by LivingShadow | [ Reply to This ]


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