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    dots Submission Name: I don't know what to call thisdots
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    Author: Abby Sinthetic
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 177/230/53
    Words: 37
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       I don't know....random words strewn together in my head...I've been singing it to a weird tune for weeks, thought I'd finally post it.


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    dotsI don't know what to call thisdots
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    On the edge
    In the back of my head
    The sorrow, the shame,
    the desperation
    DESPERATION
    Despair
    I loved you
    You left
    I killed myself
    but you won't come back
    I loved you I loved you.




    Submitted on 2006-02-13 10:55:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh so now you are the walking dead waiting for your dearly beloved to come and rescue you though you are dead... dear Mora I think from this poem it clearly states you are lost of love or someone particular though from what I know your not and I know just about everything.. hah! :D
    Great write though... I like the repetition of DESPAIR, Desperation.
    Its short but thats alright... it might help to go into a bit more detail but it seems like a poem to remain somewhat simple and short so..... *smile*..... oh yes and I agree with Joe... Don't kill yourself we have to have our drag queen apartment/home warming/welcoming party and become a success first... then I'll let you :D

    *LiLian*
    | Posted on 2006-04-10 00:00:00 | by morbidkittie | [ Reply to This ]
      don't kill yourself:P

    very emotional. i don't know what i'd call it but i'd like to hear the song you're singing this to.

    and again...don't kill yourself.
    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by joe quinn | [ Reply to This ]
      you were right, this is alittle bit random, good nontheless, but still, random. great write, you are a fantastic writer, if you could just make it a bit more clear that would be great. much <3
    ~*Trudeath
    | Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by TruDeath92 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really interesting. You have a very uniqe writing style. I enjoyed the story line of this poem. G R E A T Job ! I really like this one.

    Now + Forever ,
    < U N P e r f e c T 3
    | Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by UnPerfect | [ Reply to This ]


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