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    Author: Sarah Leger
    ASL Info:    15.f.kissimmee,Fl
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 436/387/80
    Words: 405
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 815
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    Description:
       i know it's long
    my poem though
    much love

    <33


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    quite boring
    a life so predictable
    someone could time
    my rise in the morning
    never change
    never rearrange
    stuck on this path
    no hope in sight
    and out of spite
    i go against the will
    swallow the pill
    acid to my veins
    like herroin i addict
    so many times a day
    i just have this tick
    i want it
    i need it
    i love it so
    does my nervousness show?
    can they all see my hallucinagin at work?
    can they all see my head turn
    eyes burn
    mouth run dry
    can they see my tongue tie?
    i need it
    and its not around
    ill wait
    my ear to the ground
    see things that aren't really there
    ITS JUST NOT FAIR
    standing still im caught
    havoc wrought
    earth swallows me slowly
    open my mouth to scream
    better not alarm anyone
    its whispers to me
    bind my hands behind my back
    rape me with hatred
    never look back
    symbols to penetrate the soul
    Know thyself
    an everyone else
    KNOW THYSELF
    AND EVERYONE ELSE
    walk the tight rope
    never look down
    walk the plank
    reach the ground
    no splash to save you from the water
    its all downhill from there?
    WHY THE FUCK DO YOU REALLY CARE?
    this turn of events to lead me here today
    a turn of events convincing me to stay
    talk to me in honesty
    I......I promise I'll see
    talk to me in honesty
    teach me to be
    what i was
    and what I am meant to become
    I MADE MY CHOICE
    on my knees
    I sat there
    crying by myself
    begging everything please
    give it back
    I know I did wrong
    give it back!
    GAIA
    GIVE IT BACK
    and now
    calm as can be
    the error of my ways
    haunts me through the days
    less and less in my view
    more alone than when I met you
    i'm still begging please
    come back to me
    but I know
    all you can do is hand me the keys
    back the wall
    ass on the groun
    cold cement
    replaces the earth all around
    so alone
    nothing to comfort me
    rock back and forth
    I can see
    that night
    when I drank so much
    now I see
    I see what happened to me
    alcohol bad for my soul
    I know it now
    I know the toll
    must end the rhyme
    MUST END THE RHYME
    no other choice
    than to do the time




    Submitted on 2006-02-13 13:54:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Yes, long...but very meaningful I see! You really poured yourself out in this one! It was very dark...yet there was a light to it! I see you coming to a point in your life where maybe there is more hope. And I want you to know that I commend you on the amount of strength you have come to develope!

    Oh yeah...cute pic!

    Much love girl!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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