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    dots Submission Name: Carved With Caredots
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    Author: brokenroses
    ASL Info:    17/m/indiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 191/192/62
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 693
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    Description:
       she never could make up her mind.


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    dotsCarved With Caredots
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    Frozen fingers
    Of molten ash
    Do clutch at mine
    In icy grasp

    Lifeless eyes
    Burning bright
    Do stare at me
    Black as night

    But hold me close
    Now turn me loose
    For when I go
    They tighten the noose

    You hanged yourself
    In our tree
    Above the heart
    Carved with care

    Dearest love
    Etched in mind
    Holding tight
    To waste my time

    You cut yourself
    Into my heart
    Above mistakes
    Carved with care




    Submitted on 2006-02-13 15:21:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i absolutely LOVED the imagery and word usage in this poem. it was beautifully constructed. i especially liked this piece.
    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by vintagepepper | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting. So im guessing this has to do with lost love, waste of time in essence of life, and those memories that constantly haunt and never go away. I like this piece. I had to read a couple of time to grasp it, I might be wrong. Either this is a good one.

    Saint Kairo
    | Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by Saint | [ Reply to This ]


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