Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: My twisted valentinedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 605
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 354



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsMy twisted valentinedots
    -------------------------------------------


    My blood is spread on a white paper, heart with your name it. On your cheeks I leave imprinted my blood stained kisses. Your name engrave in my arm. Twisted black heart is now yours. Squeeze it, embrance it, feel the blood runing out. I scream out in the heat of a chemical romance that I love you even with my dying breath. This is my twisted valentine.




    Submitted on 2006-02-13 20:24:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I loved it blood and all.Its true and relatable. Nice imagery too.Not normal poetry but who is to cage art and soul.Nice write and keep it up.Later
    | Posted on 2006-04-09 00:00:00 | by nosferotu_gurl | [ Reply to This ]
      Jeez, that was a little creepy! How could something like this come from someone so young? It needs a bit of structure, so it is easier to read, but I liked it.
    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by Peachpitt | [ Reply to This ]
      the bloody stuff wasn't my style but i really enjoyed the imagery you used. my favorite part and maybe the grossest was "and on your cheecks i leave blood stained kisses".
    | Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by LLRDD | [ Reply to This ]
      wo hooo, did you kill him? Nicely done dark and twisted. No wonder you are one of my favorite poets.
    I love you even with my dying breath.
    Kind of romeo and juliet setiments seen throughout this writing
    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by Evil Jesture | [ Reply to This ]
      I was intrieged , I defenitly loved it , keep up the great work the whole thing was amazin , I got the image of a dark love defenitly my style
    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by pasardspandora | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    91234

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry