making a point
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a freestyle i wrote to pass time for all the hatas out there. anyways tell me what you think.
making a point
I need to make a point no wait it's a confession thinking you can rap betta i'm gonna teach you a lesson down wit young warriors yea they can out spit you too down wit BTC wifey to loc blue didn't think i could rap yea i came to fmble i came to drop that beat and make yo ass stumble sitting there mumbling about how i need to suck ya dick you need to grow one first nigga and get rid of that little stick you got yo rhymes from a krispy kremes boz while i wrote my rhymes when i was on lock not lock down in jail but lock down in the house i'm supposed to be lazy how 'come yo ass is on the couch squash that shit who eva told you i was nice i can be nice but it come wit a price okay wateva i'm just fuckin gwit you so turn of the beat 'cause i'm through |
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| I guerss the storry was cool but see if u can ryme 4 lines with each other like you should ryme the word right here u know the word in the rear I started smoking your birth year and world war 3 is very nere see is had and to try and make them fit in a beat. u should get a keybord and play a sample and try and mak it fit in the beat. its just a sugestion. Use it or forget it. | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by DrewDilla | [ Reply to This ] | well, I guess you have alot of pent up aggression...You express it well...I never understood the whole rap genre but I do recognize it as a form of expression...Very well written in that aspect...The blatent disgracing of the guy you were speaking to was very prominent in the fourteenth line...kinda made me chuckle...keep it up. | Sincerely Semper | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by Semper Fidelis | [ Reply to This ] | to simple for me. I would suggest striving for more creativity in your delivery and word choosing. but im just one opinion, everyones different so check out my [censored] and c where im coming from or, find out this opinion has no credibality. | | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ] | this was alright. the flow in the beginning was good but kinda simple but u kept it throughout most of the rap so it was fluid at least. but towards the end u completely lost it. the end kinda sucked. it seemed like this whole thing was on the surface and there was no deeper meaning to anything that u had to say. it wasn't bad but it wasn't good either | | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ] | |
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