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Mind Sex


Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 73
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
Total Views: 1103
Average Vote:    3.0000
Bytes: 452



Description:


okay the title is self explanatory comment.


Mind Sex



I came here to wonder
i came here to find
the pleasure i'd get
making love with my mind
will it be like sex
will it be addictive
or will it be like Jamie Foxx said
something unpredicted
would it clense my sould
will it clear my head
or would it make me
want to fuck instead
whatever it may do
whatever it may be
please have mind sex
with me




Submitted on 2006-02-13 22:45:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i found it vey imagitively creative. it was quite hilares and fun to read, good job.
| Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by J-IDENTITY | [ Reply to This ]
  ok I dont know what mind sex is so I dont get it. Is it just like cyber sex. u type a thought then they type a thought. or say a thought on the phone?
| Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by DrewDilla | [ Reply to This ]
  Well, definitely unique.

You rhyme well and the flow is great. As previously mentioned, 'cleanse' is misspelled in line 9, as is 'soul'.

Not much I can critique here... I agree with jeffiner, I'm left a bit speechless O.o
| Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by lesser_threat | [ Reply to This ]
  this [censored] it whack, yo.
hahah.

i don't really know what to say after reading this.
except to correct your spelling of the word cleanse.
it had good flow... words fit together really well and all...

i.. just... i'm just kinda left speechles.
thats a good thing i suppose.



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| Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by jeffiner | [ Reply to This ]
  well hi der.damsel of Mind Sex
n if i shall ans. yr question of havin Mind sex wid u{as in yr last line}, i shud say No. hope didnt break yr heart..nyways jokes apart..this write was cool n wierd{which is nice}
js keep writin
wasif
| Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by wasif | [ Reply to This ]
  weird...the last lines didn't flow that well and that's the only thing i can see that's wrong with this one. the rest was really good. i don't think i've ever tried mind sex before. maybe it's time to experiment...
| Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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