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    dots Submission Name: depth of a souldots

    Author: darkestlight
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 19/29/12
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsdepth of a souldots

    I looked into her eyes
    And saw her soul
    I entered a whole new world
    The fiery rage- contained
    Truth, dancing with lies
    They revealed her life
    Like an open book
    Almost hearing the silent cries
    But then I learnt that eyes deceive
    I saw her smileÖ
    It could light up seven skies
    Never was a heart so pure
    Joys make life worth every hour
    For every wrong there is a right
    Perfection is only a dream
    Itís the flaws that make life complete.

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      Have you ever done a spider-web of yourself?

    Write your name in the centre of a page, and describe yourself in single words and short phrases. Name the qualities that make you you.

    Then connect the words to each other, and you will see that your best qualities are usually the flip-side of your worst.

    That's what this means to me. It is the Ying and the Yang, the light and the darkness: it's what makes us so very human.

    But in order to see the best qualities of any individual, you must also acknowledge the worst. This is the essence of true love.
    | Posted on 2011-03-09 00:00:00 | by BlankSheet | [ Reply to This ]
      bravo! i really like it. my favorite parts would have to be "truth, dancing with lies" and "its the flaws that make life complete" (which is oh so very true!)
    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by Roula | [ Reply to This ]

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