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    dots Submission Name: Down W/Valentine's Daydots

    Author: Brownsdelight
    ASL Info:    25/F/NUEVO MEXICO
    Elite Ratio:    4.43 - 1251/1055/115
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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       he he he he he *shrug*

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    dotsDown W/Valentine's Daydots

    Keep your candies and cards
    And flowers that wiltÖ.
    Who needs to celebrate
    This holiday that corporate
    Americaís built?

    Iíll sit here and sulk
    Be moody and depressed
    Whine and cry about
    A butt knocker of an ex.

    I donít want to hear
    Chatter or giggles galore
    Frankly I think those dozen
    Roses are nothing but an eyesore

    Donít rush to my desk
    To show off that new ring
    I mean after allÖ..isnít
    There a saying ďlove donít cost a thing?Ē

    You can go and live on
    Cloud nine if you wish
    Me Iíll just sit here and mutter
    ďCupidís one twisted and sick bitchĒ

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      ok, i had to come check out some of your stuff since you did the same for me...

    and i say to this poem Rock On Biatch. i hate v-day. i mean, i do celebrate it with my hubby, but i hate the whole Chocolate and Roses thing. I wrote this prose a while back, which i ended up deleting when i went on a rampage..but it pretty much said that buying chocolates is a special way of saying I Want You To Have Thunder Thighs...and roses are a wonderful symbol of love if you expect it to wilt and die and end up in the trash can...

    yeah so i've always said that someone should take cupids bow and arrow and shoot him in the eff'in head with it.

    so again, Rock On
    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
      I've always thought that Valentines day was a stupid idea. Like I'd be less flattered if someone showed their love any other day of the year. I don't think the symbolism of the holiday means sh.it either.

    I enjoyed the write, it was lighthearted, and a little "scorn" laced. Quite comical, actually. I can tell from it that you love intensely, and that you don't trivialize it with some stupid day. I think that's great.
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by afterglow | [ Reply to This ]
      Right I agree with you there. However, to me this poem was just not only a funny little piece. In it I could perceive great depression and I guess I can say jelousy by the secon and the fourth stanza. Although everyone thinks this poem only is a mere joke to Valentine's day I think it actually goes deeper than that. Although I must confess that all those things I perceive could be mockery in the end so that's it.
    I really liked the image that was created in the second stanza.
    Great work!
    | Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by Lana | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a write I would not have believed came from you
    I get the feeling you have recently been scorned by someone you thought Loved you
    The funny thing about this write is until the very last line I thought you were speaking of how Love for your soulmate should be everyday not just one day
    The last line threw me for a loop
    All in All
    Another great write from you
    God Bless

    Please keep in touch
    | Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      DOWN WITH CUPID...stupidmotherf-ingsonsa[censored]es-diaper-wearing b*stard...

    AWESOME write Tina...I think this shall now be my anthem every year...after all what's does some guy wearing a diaper have to do with some priest named Valentine getting killed for his faith? Although I suppose that makes sense...a priest that can't get none being honored yearly by people trying to get some
    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes. I just wrote one on V day as well, and I loved the line "Who needs to celebrate
    This holiday that corporate
    Americaís built?"
    that is such a true statement. I believe if you read a little of my piece, that relate. I also like the piece on the flowers that wilt, I have a similiar writing part in my poem about V day. Thanks for posting this, it made me grin. take care

    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by irish storm | [ Reply to This ]
      I dont think there has been one thing you have written that I have not enjoyed, but this is a favorite. You did a great job and it is funny as hell. So F Valentines day, I give it the finger for ya.

    Happy V Day,lol

    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]
      You picked the perfect pic to go along with this poem! I hope you still accept my valentine to you. I am just laughing at this. I can see this girl in the picutre beating up anyone who even start to utter the words happy valentine's day. lol. This was very funny and realistic to any who wish to kick cupid's ass right now. lol. this had a great flow and made my day today. Great job. I found another fav for today.

    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Rock on girl! Dam the man who decided today is a holiday!

    'Iíll sit here and sulk
    Be moody and depressed
    Whine and cry about
    A butt knocker of an ex'

    that is exactly what I will be doing all 24 hours of the day. lol

    thanks for the smiles and lafs-I really needed that today!

    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by faln_angl | [ Reply to This ]
      haha, i love it! I totaly agree whether you meant you really feel that way or not. i really love it! It really does get annoying, i mean if you love someone, you're supposed to treat them special everyday right? Anyway, the one thing i can say thats not postive is the scheme in which you wroet it brakes it up a little wrong in my mind. Other than that...brilliant! A new favorite!
    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by Mercy December | [ Reply to This ]
      awesome! I agree, first of all. And second of all, this poem is great! It's so concise, it cuts through the cutesy hallmark image of this fake, malignant holiday...
    I love the last line
    Me Iíll just sit here and mutter
    ďCupidís one twisted and sick [censored]Ē
    That's hilarious. And the rhyming is pitch-perfect. Congrats!
    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by Fantasma | [ Reply to This ]

    this is what i needed today! LOL

    you already know how i feel about that bas.tard Cupid!

    he bet not show his face round herr! lol

    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
      sometimes i wish someone would shoot Cupid with
    his own arrow!! but then again, i can't really be
    too cynical about love.. but agree about the
    commercialization of love with this particular day.
    i don't need a designated day to express my love.
    my sadness today lies with the fact that i can't be
    with the one i love.. but i still keep the love in my
    heart and believe in it.

    @@@@ here's some cyber roses for you today.
    pass 'em on!

    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      HA! HA!
    Very funny. Totally the anti V-day poem.

    This could be a greeting card for it just reads that way, but then that would be fueling the corporate machine.

    Nice and silly write Tina!
    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      lololol YIPPEEEEE!
    ah yes, cupid that cruel grecian [censored]!
    very well done darlin!
    i'd send you a dozen roses, but
    you'd probably just burn them ;)
    i, too, am on the anti-valentine's-day assault committee...why don't u step on over to my page and check out my little ditty called "itchin' to love you"...i'm sure you'll enjoy ;)

    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]
      I dunno. Valentine's Day is a good excuse to give girls flowers. I did last night. One red rose, and one yellow rose petal with my number on it.

    Yeah, actin' like an amateur...didn't get her number.

    I know what you mean though. All the commercialization definitely takes the 'romance' out of it. Same reason you'll never catch me participating in one of those dating...match making whatchamacallits...

    I do know some married couples who met that way though.

    And i did almost finish a real turd of a poem with Cupid (in the common misconception as a Cherub) in it once. I'll slip it in right here. Get my word count up...d'you mind?

    Predestination (all roads lead to _____)

    Greece gave us
    dildos and Helen
    Christ only gave us
    tears and regret

    finding Greece the
    fairer of the two
    i worshipped idols
    of antique hue

    but false prophets abound
    in such mythic clouds
    i lost all reason
    amongst that crowd

    iíve seen many forms divine
    (Helens arenít that hard to find)
    but they were only imperfect forms
    reflected in my eternal mind

    still, i placed them
    high on a pedestal
    many would come
    and many would fall

    time and again i wandered back
    as if my will was not free
    as if what pleases the gods
    should so please me

    once again i plead
    with the gods to conjure
    the essence, the flame
    of some new messenger

    i know Christ is love
    but i never met him
    so i prayed for a cherub
    and the gods sent a seraphim
    And who is that in the picture...seems familiar...i just can't place her.

    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by twacky | [ Reply to This ]
      I clapped my hands and saig hallejulah by the end of your poem. it is so true, valentine's day is so overrated. I am currently in a relationship and what I think is so romantic and so beautiful is not a ring, flowers, or fancy dinner. what I enjoy most is having an uninterrupted time with my bf. that is sexy to me. and working in retail doesn;t help because not all people should be allowed to exhibit PDA. oh-no.

    | Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by Lee Minsu | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah! I hate Valentine's Day, which is also the three year anniversary of my very first date with the despicable a s shole that broke my heart and used me for his own twisted, selfish purposes. But f u c k him too, I'm going to make something out of myself so spectacular that he repeatedly asks himself why he left (If he isn't already). But I just had to say, great write. THey always are!
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]

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