ok, i had to come check out some of your stuff since you did the same for me...
and i say to this poem Rock On Biatch. i hate v-day. i mean, i do celebrate it with my hubby, but i hate the whole Chocolate and Roses thing. I wrote this prose a while back, which i ended up deleting when i went on a rampage..but it pretty much said that buying chocolates is a special way of saying I Want You To Have Thunder Thighs...and roses are a wonderful symbol of love if you expect it to wilt and die and end up in the trash can...
yeah so i've always said that someone should take cupids bow and arrow and shoot him in the eff'in head with it.
I've always thought that Valentines day was a stupid idea. Like I'd be less flattered if someone showed their love any other day of the year. I don't think the symbolism of the holiday means sh.it either.
I enjoyed the write, it was lighthearted, and a little "scorn" laced. Quite comical, actually. I can tell from it that you love intensely, and that you don't trivialize it with some stupid day. I think that's great. Later, Toby
Right I agree with you there. However, to me this poem was just not only a funny little piece. In it I could perceive great depression and I guess I can say jelousy by the secon and the fourth stanza. Although everyone thinks this poem only is a mere joke to Valentine's day I think it actually goes deeper than that. Although I must confess that all those things I perceive could be mockery in the end so that's it. I really liked the image that was created in the second stanza. Great work!
This is a write I would not have believed came from you I get the feeling you have recently been scorned by someone you thought Loved you The funny thing about this write is until the very last line I thought you were speaking of how Love for your soulmate should be everyday not just one day The last line threw me for a loop All in All Another great write from you God Bless Ron
DOWN WITH CUPID...stupidmotherf-ingsonsa[censored]es-diaper-wearing b*stard...
AWESOME write Tina...I think this shall now be my anthem every year...after all what's does some guy wearing a diaper have to do with some priest named Valentine getting killed for his faith? Although I suppose that makes sense...a priest that can't get none being honored yearly by people trying to get some
Yes. I just wrote one on V day as well, and I loved the line "Who needs to celebrate This holiday that corporate Americaís built?" that is such a true statement. I believe if you read a little of my piece, that relate. I also like the piece on the flowers that wilt, I have a similiar writing part in my poem about V day. Thanks for posting this, it made me grin. take care
You picked the perfect pic to go along with this poem! I hope you still accept my valentine to you. I am just laughing at this. I can see this girl in the picutre beating up anyone who even start to utter the words happy valentine's day. lol. This was very funny and realistic to any who wish to kick cupid's ass right now. lol. this had a great flow and made my day today. Great job. I found another fav for today.
haha, i love it! I totaly agree whether you meant you really feel that way or not. i really love it! It really does get annoying, i mean if you love someone, you're supposed to treat them special everyday right? Anyway, the one thing i can say thats not postive is the scheme in which you wroet it brakes it up a little wrong in my mind. Other than that...brilliant! A new favorite!
awesome! I agree, first of all. And second of all, this poem is great! It's so concise, it cuts through the cutesy hallmark image of this fake, malignant holiday... I love the last line Me Iíll just sit here and mutter ďCupidís one twisted and sick [censored]Ē That's hilarious. And the rhyming is pitch-perfect. Congrats!
sometimes i wish someone would shoot Cupid with his own arrow!! but then again, i can't really be too cynical about love.. but agree about the commercialization of love with this particular day. i don't need a designated day to express my love. my sadness today lies with the fact that i can't be with the one i love.. but i still keep the love in my heart and believe in it.
@@@@ here's some cyber roses for you today. pass 'em on!
lololol YIPPEEEEE! ah yes, cupid that cruel grecian [censored]! very well done darlin! i'd send you a dozen roses, but you'd probably just burn them ;) i, too, am on the anti-valentine's-day assault committee...why don't u step on over to my page and check out my little ditty called "itchin' to love you"...i'm sure you'll enjoy ;)
I dunno. Valentine's Day is a good excuse to give girls flowers. I did last night. One red rose, and one yellow rose petal with my number on it.
Yeah, actin' like an amateur...didn't get her number.
I know what you mean though. All the commercialization definitely takes the 'romance' out of it. Same reason you'll never catch me participating in one of those dating...match making whatchamacallits...
I do know some married couples who met that way though.
And i did almost finish a real turd of a poem with Cupid (in the common misconception as a Cherub) in it once. I'll slip it in right here. Get my word count up...d'you mind?
Predestination (all roads lead to _____)
Greece gave us dildos and Helen Christ only gave us tears and regret
finding Greece the fairer of the two i worshipped idols of antique hue
but false prophets abound in such mythic clouds i lost all reason amongst that crowd
iíve seen many forms divine (Helens arenít that hard to find) but they were only imperfect forms reflected in my eternal mind
still, i placed them high on a pedestal many would come and many would fall
time and again i wandered back as if my will was not free as if what pleases the gods should so please me
once again i plead with the gods to conjure the essence, the flame of some new messenger
i know Christ is love but i never met him so i prayed for a cherub and the gods sent a seraphim . . . And who is that in the picture...seems familiar...i just can't place her.
I clapped my hands and saig hallejulah by the end of your poem. it is so true, valentine's day is so overrated. I am currently in a relationship and what I think is so romantic and so beautiful is not a ring, flowers, or fancy dinner. what I enjoy most is having an uninterrupted time with my bf. that is sexy to me. and working in retail doesn;t help because not all people should be allowed to exhibit PDA. oh-no.
Yeah! I hate Valentine's Day, which is also the three year anniversary of my very first date with the despicable a s shole that broke my heart and used me for his own twisted, selfish purposes. But f u c k him too, I'm going to make something out of myself so spectacular that he repeatedly asks himself why he left (If he isn't already). But I just had to say, great write. THey always are!