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    dots Submission Name: lucrative ludditedots
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    Author: wasif
    ASL Info:    18/m/Delhi
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 47/42/16
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 703
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 528



    Description:
        The poem talks about the fact that it is not important that in order to be able to acquire Wealth and the much desired Money, one needs to be technologically very sound or for that matter become tech-savvy in order to survive in this so modified world.
    It, basically is a mockery to those who believe that if a person is not using the technology for his business or his lucrative avails, he may not be able to make Money or to put in the lines of the society-make it to the Top.
    For here there is a person who is not a very tech-savvy buff, but Yes, he is able to make it to the top.
    The poem even focuses to the very stereotypical notions that remain in the minds of people as a mind set and start believing what the world demands of them- they forget their own individuality and thinking and are carried away in this blind race- without even thinking that the main lucrative nature comes from the brain.
    The poem does not tell to be miles away from the new technology, for technology is itself an outcome of the lucrative nature of the brain&#8230; it is just a notion that Yes it is not an illusion to achieve success and &#8220;money&#8221; without the use of technology.


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    dotslucrative ludditedots
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    There is perhaps, a soul I met,
    Not in least, one of us,
    For no mere passion, his heart conceive
    Just a drive, in a world he lives.

    In collecting the materials,
    For his comfort,
    Warmth of his home,
    No less, does he lag back one of us,
    Being a Luddite, he calls himself.

    Be it so, what he portrays,
    It is, he who holds the enigma within,
    The power to rise to a lucrative nature,
    Yes, he is the Lucrative Luddite.





    Submitted on 2006-02-14 12:21:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You should not need to pre-explain a poem, so that a reader can understand it. Any good poem is self explanatory. This poem I am afraid is not. Try reading your poem with the mind of a stranger not acquainted with the personal symbology of your own brain and you will understand what I mean.
    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by hanuman | [ Reply to This ]
      i could not really connect with this one, i feel it needs more and so i feel like i still need to meet this person, i know nothing of him except that he is a mystery and someone who has effected you in a big way, this was very poetic though!
    thanks for the write:>
    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by orpheus | [ Reply to This ]
      I personally liked your description more than the poem itself... more because of the opinion you stated. The poem itself didn't make much of an impact on me... perhaps it wasn't grounded in juxtapositions or any attempt at poetic devices... not that that is the be all and end all... just that... I don't think you said enough in your poem to make me think much differently. Does that make sense?

    And I agree with hanuman on his opinion on this... perhaps a tweaking to really flesh this out more might be in order. Just a thought.

    Peace,

    Jase
    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]


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