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    Author: Leon Kennedy
    ASL Info:    15/m/La
    Elite Ratio:    2.78 - 51/75/22
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 791
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 600



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       i dont know. have not written in a while. tried a new rhyme scheme. tell me how much it sux. thanx.


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    why did you leave me waiting at the alter,
    why couldnt you go through the trouble of,
    telling me i was not your true love,

    i tried doing things that were comforting,
    i tried to escape to my dreams,
    i wanted nothing else than to be whole again,

    but to do that i would need my heart back,
    and i just cant ask you for the thing i need,
    for that would make me too full of greed,

    so i will continue all my suffering,
    ill spend the rest of my life forgetting,
    that im not complete.......





    Submitted on 2006-02-14 20:05:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "and i just cant ask you for the thing i need,
    for that would make me too full of greed"

    Was my fav line. You did a great job with this one also! I can relate to it. But not going into details here.
    Anyway, you did great.
    *Walks away, tear in eye*
    ~David~
    | Posted on 2006-11-22 00:00:00 | by D.C.M. | [ Reply to This ]
      hey! this is really good! um.. thers no rhyme scheme though unless kaila is missing something! but its was still good! it waz meaningful to me and it meant a lot to me! its a fav! did this happen to u? i think leavin someone at the altar is rude and embarrasing! and a TOTAL waste of good money! anyway good job!
    ~akaila~
    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really good.
    i love the topic but no rhymn sceme but that all gud cos its a really meaningful poem even though there is no rhymn sceem.
    any way good one
    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by Brat05 | [ Reply to This ]
      It was good I can some what relate , I gave my heart to someone , but they did not return the faver , so I think it depicts your feelings well
    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by pasardspandora | [ Reply to This ]


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