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Because Of You

Author: Hip-Hop Honey
ASL Info:    16/f/canada
Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105 /86 /31
Words: 75
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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This is the Valentines poem I wrote for the guy I love..It's not all that wonderful but I decided to post it anyways..Hope you like it

Because Of You

I've never have seen your face
Only in a splendid place
Called my dreams
I've never felt your touch
But I wish everday
For your embrace
I believe one day
This will all come true
And when it does
I will hold you
Kiss you and promise
Never to let you go
I love you more then you know
And I live for this day
Thats why my world still turns
Because of you

Submitted on 2006-02-14 23:42:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was good the shortness of the poem doesn't really account for this poem it was good for a valentine's day poem sounds like somehitng u would see read in a valentine's day card. I know how much you now felt for Mylo and I'm sry for ever questioning your feelings for him, and I kwno he is gone now, but if it is fate you will be together in the end Keep writing lady love ya

| Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]
  It spoke honesty. it was good. You opened it up nicely. It reminded me of when i use to look for that special girl, but never found her, i had a vision in my head, but no presence.
| Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]

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