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    dots Submission Name: He always wore blackdots

    Author: haileebobailee
    ASL Info:    18/F/NV
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 30/41/15
    Words: 231
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHe always wore blackdots

    I remember the song, the day, and your voice, off tune.
    Your bright blue eyes come to mind.
    I fell for you, the boy in black.
    You had shaggy brown hair and quirky charm.

    I knew I fell for you that day in August,
    you grabbed my hand and we jumped into the hotel swimming pool at midnight, fully clothed.
    Nights spent watching all of our favorite movies,
    but Fight Club was always our first choice.

    That black t-shirt that you loved so much, I still have it.
    It smells like you,
    a mix of sweat and Tommy cologne.

    You left your guitar at my house that day you serenaded me
    I sat on the floor and watched you play in the glow of the firelight,
    "Why does this night have to end? Why don’t we hit restart and pause it at our favorite parts, we’ll skip the goodbye."

    Well the good bye was skipped.
    You didn't call when you said you would but I sat by the phone anyway.
    You avoided my tears.
    I cried, but not for you, for me.
    You got the best of me this time.

    The song is over,
    my heart now broken
    and your guitar
    in pieces on my floor.

    Submitted on 2006-02-15 01:06:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow. this reminds me so much of me i am almost crying. i love the part about skipping the goodbye and leading that into him never calling. very clever.
    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      its is fantastic. i really like it. theres something about this poem that, i dunno i guess i cant descrive it. but it has a charm to it. the tittle first got to me, i read it and realised i had to read it. great job
    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by Roula | [ Reply to This ]
      Something similar to this has happened to me. I know what it feels like to have this happen yet I find it hard to express the feelings. Well done and the title grabbed my attention. Very personal which is good
    | Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by BrokenStream | [ Reply to This ]

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