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    dots Submission Name: A Second's Sojourn in Beautydots
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    Author: zhi wei
    ASL Info:    17, Male, Malaysia.
    Elite Ratio:    6.14 - 171/203/53
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 343
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       I haven't been sonnets in a long time... put a lot of effort into this, I guess. and heart. comments, thoughts and interpretations greatly appreciated. I'd appreciate it if there's no bashing on this one though, because it's very personal.


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    dotsA Second's Sojourn in Beautydots
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    Daylight's pretence illumine darkened plains
    with sole glimmers divided in the skies;
    As I, a prisoner behind these panes,
    gaze with a wishful heart and wistful eyes.
    The hurdle lies not in hills to travel
    nor in time's distance; 'tis diminutive.
    For the heavens' hold is hardly brittle
    in a battle, for these bright lights to leave.
    O, but I fall; buoyant beneath its glow
    or its slightest sign, by a graceful glance
    Breath sojourns for a second, but even so
    it ends, 'tis but the power of perchance.
    So long this paints her smile, mine too it keeps,
    with wistful eyes, my wishful heart that weeps.





    Submitted on 2006-02-15 10:04:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      As for interpretations, it seems to me a poem of either unrequited love or of a "missed connection".

    While I may be off in the specifics, I imagine one sitting in a bus or car on a gloomy day. Momentarily "she" is passed by and ones chest tightens, breath is held.

    Though there are some hints at sadness, overall the brief flirting has bouyed an otherwise dreary day.

    -Frank
    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by FrankBlissett | [ Reply to This ]



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