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    dots Submission Name: one more day in my fairy taledots
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    Author: kocdagm
    Elite Ratio:    2.19 - 2/6/2
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 141
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       hi everyone! this is just a quick poem,
    about not wanting to grow up. i did it from the points of little miss muffet and little bo peep.
    i know the grammer is incorrect, that was on purpose. if you have any suggestions, please let me hear them! hope you like it!


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    dotsone more day in my fairy taledots
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    have you any wool, my friend?
    just a handful to keep me warm?
    my ragged clothes are freezing,
    my petticoat is torn.

    i know i'm in the wrong rhyme,
    and i understand that's strange.
    but the spider wouldn't leave me be,
    i was running out of time.

    you know, just last week it was,
    mr.wolfie ate my friend.
    snow white is gone and married,
    my childhood is at an end.

    everyone is changing,
    even jack horner has left home.
    the corner seems so empty without him.
    plus, the dog has found his bone.

    i figure it's time to grow up,
    leave my sheep, grow old and gaunt.
    but one more day in a fairy tale
    is really all i want.




    Submitted on 2006-02-15 11:17:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very really Great great great good nice nice nice awesome I really liked it imagery flow very deep lots of emotions good job keep it up, keep writing.
    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by Sethesin | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like it. I'm not sure if you were trying to get warm and torn to rhyme because it doesn't lol. Over all i like the meaning, it speaks out to th child in all of us.
    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by BigRed | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is a cute little poem filled with lots of fairy tales. You have done a good job with this idea, and I think you could make this one even longer and add more to it with more fairy tales. However, leaving this one as is would be fine too cause it is a good idea that you have made into a nice poem. This is a good way to express not wanting to grow up and at the same time telling how things change through the passing of time, even in fairy tales. I here ya too on not wanting to grow up. Me too, and I am 35 haha! Life only gets harder the older you get, I have learned. But it also is filled with wonderful experiences too. I enjoyed reading your poem. Nice job. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]



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