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    dots Submission Name: My glass rosedots

    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       yeahh...another bad night with my dad

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    dotsMy glass rosedots

    I remember those nights, I stay up all night replaying the words that you screamed. I know I fault, I know I fail when I try. Please, dad, be careful with me. Dad, know that I fragile just as glass rose.

    I hold it all in, but at night my pilliow hears it all. Muffled screams, and choked back tears- my lullaby for every Godforsaken night. I know I can break a pin drop. I'm as fragile as a glass rose.

    Dad you broke me. Shaddered rose lying in the hospital bed. Angel with her wings torn. Im sorry Im not worth it. Im sorry I couldn't take it.

    Submitted on 2006-02-15 16:59:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      aww i'm so sry, i dont know what its, like and i dont really want to, but, to my dismay, you made me feel just teh way you felt, i dont know weather to say good poet, beucase ur writing is wonderful, or bad poet becuase u made me feel this way.
    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by TruDeath92 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really effective and somewhat eerie. It's sad but really well written. It gave me good mental images, and made me feel as if I was right there seeing it. Liked this a lot!
    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by Shortee807 | [ Reply to This ]
      im sooo sry my dad used to beat me. for little things at that. good work but you might want to go back and make a few corrections to the fist paragraph.

    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by lashelle | [ Reply to This ]
      this was good i can realte to what your your saying i have problems with my dad to...Your poem really touched me deep when I read it..And I'm sorry you have to go through this trust me!..The part I love most is : I hold it all in, but at night my pilliow hears it all. Muffled screams, and choked back tears- my lullaby for every Godforsaken night...But if you ever need to talk you can message me..hope things get better for you..It was a great poem..later

    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by Hip-Hop Honey | [ Reply to This ]
      hi dis piece is smwhat diff. frm rest. Why? prhaps the topic, then the style. bt i feel dat the words cud b a litle rhymin or so coz the topic was gr8 bt impact a little less.
    take care
    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by wasif | [ Reply to This ]

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