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    dots Submission Name: An Ending Friendshipdots
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    Author: H.a.n.n.a.h
    ASL Info:    15/f/wa
    Elite Ratio:    2.62 - 5/10/8
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 560
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       I was best friends for 9 years, our relationship then started to desinigrate. i became depressed and thoughts flooded my head


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    waiting for a never ending song to end
    is how I spend my day
    wishing and hoping you still consider me as your friend
    I could be the one to blame
    but I have suffered one too many hours of pain
    invisible tears drown my face
    with something you cant replace
    something that used to be filled with a smile
    I hope you know, you wont bring me down
    no matter how hard you try
    I am better than that, better than the new person you have become
    refusing to believe that anything is wrong
    quit imagining and get to reality
    and it will be there whether or not you are going to put any effort into fixing it
    I have done all that I could but I guess you've moved on
    it will crash and burn, then maybe you will learn
    that once you've thrown it away it's hard to retrace




    Submitted on 2006-02-15 22:37:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really like this poem, and you already know that. my favorite line is deffinately "waiting for a never ending song to end" among a few others.. but i've already told you this so whats the use in repeating myself?

    - cindy
    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by Roula | [ Reply to This ]


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