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    dots Submission Name: It's a ridedots

    Author: H.a.n.n.a.h
    ASL Info:    15/f/wa
    Elite Ratio:    2.62 - 5/10/8
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       ideas are thoughts..

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    dotsIt's a ridedots

    Itís a ride
    I sit in the tiny car and start my journey
    Jolting back and forth from side to side
    Tossing and turning
    Only waking up to find itís a dream
    A dream in which I fall
    From miles high only I never hit the ground
    I just fall from emptiness
    Contemplating my existence from each corner
    Of the sphere that circles round
    Creating and destroying new ideas everyday
    The ride is almost over
    And I have accomplished nothing through the fall
    Just the thought of enlightment
    No rope to tie me down
    No water to make me drown
    Iím falling through the open space
    Jolting back and forth in the tiny car
    That makes me toss and turn
    As I fall from emptiness

    Submitted on 2006-02-15 23:08:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      even though you "pulled it out of your ass" as you said... its a lot better than i can write when i'm trying.

    and also this site makes you keep writingsometimes if your comments arent long enough so now i'm rambling so it will let me post this.
    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by Roula | [ Reply to This ]

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