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    dots Submission Name: Black Gowndots

    Author: silly monkey
    ASL Info:    17/ female/ somewhere
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 83/103/32
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       Who said poetry had to ryhme??? lol

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    dotsBlack Gowndots

    Black weather gown of rags
    Crease and harsh spoken, from the wind
    Moth snips of scatter pieces
    Cling to the moonlit flesh
    Sockets of magots and bristle teeth
    With red webs of hair embracing the cheeks
    Nothing but once a Black Gown Beauty
    Who forgot herself in the fog back home
    It only took a strangle from the brown snake
    To coil against her bare visible neck
    As she drop to her prison below
    Snap from a lopside neck
    Eyes roll back; air pierce short
    Black Gown suaves with her tree
    Suaves with a souless dance.

    Submitted on 2006-02-16 11:18:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very dark, this was beautiful! the title caught my eye and i pretty much liked every picture and emotion put on this. the black gown label really impressed me and made me love it more
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
      this is kind of confusing to me...let me try to get a few things figured out:
    First-Is this about some girl who wore a black gown, and therefore is called "black gown beauty"?
    Secondly-She died by strangulation from a snake, right?

    But it's got nice descriptions, though some of it just doesn't make sense:

    "Moth snips of scatter pieces
    Cling to the moonlit flesh
    Sockets of magots and bristle teeth"

    maybe you could elaborate a little bit more on what some of this means?

    And no, poetry does not have to rhyme. Mine never does!

    | Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by darkwinged | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey buddy- it's about a girl hanging herself on a tree. She has a black dress to resemble death and every other detail resmebles a dark visual of her to describe her actions. But it was meant to be confusing lol... you were pretty close.
    | Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by silly monkey | [ Reply to This ]
      well whatever confusing or not i liked it and yeah i did get the implication that she did commit suicide. thats only because of this line:

    "Snap from a lopside neck
    Eyes roll back; air pierce short"

    it was worded really well. I couldnt do that ever. you really have some talent there.
    keep posting and keep the flow up. A

    P.S. your completely right poetry does not need to rhyme check out my poem " A silent Armageddon" its similar to yours and it does not rhyme.

    a fellow poet,
    | Posted on 2006-02-18 00:00:00 | by Harmageddon | [ Reply to This ]

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