Black Gown -------------------------------------------
Black weather gown of rags
Crease and harsh spoken, from the wind
Moth snips of scatter pieces
Cling to the moonlit flesh
Sockets of magots and bristle teeth
With red webs of hair embracing the cheeks
Nothing but once a Black Gown Beauty
Who forgot herself in the fog back home
It only took a strangle from the brown snake
To coil against her bare visible neck
As she drop to her prison below
Snap from a lopside neck
Eyes roll back; air pierce short
Black Gown suaves with her tree
Suaves with a souless dance.
very dark, this was beautiful! the title caught my eye and i pretty much liked every picture and emotion put on this. the black gown label really impressed me and made me love it more
this is kind of confusing to me...let me try to get a few things figured out: First-Is this about some girl who wore a black gown, and therefore is called "black gown beauty"? Secondly-She died by strangulation from a snake, right?
But it's got nice descriptions, though some of it just doesn't make sense:
"Moth snips of scatter pieces Cling to the moonlit flesh Sockets of magots and bristle teeth"
maybe you could elaborate a little bit more on what some of this means?
And no, poetry does not have to rhyme. Mine never does!
Hey buddy- it's about a girl hanging herself on a tree. She has a black dress to resemble death and every other detail resmebles a dark visual of her to describe her actions. But it was meant to be confusing lol... you were pretty close.
Submission Name: Black Gown
