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    dots Submission Name: Blossomingdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 35
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I just posted this to remind all of you that I'm still writing. I love you guys, Amy


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    dotsBlossomingdots
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    She feels like a calyx
    with its petals glued shut,
    any attempt to bloom
    causing intense damage,
    and though it might destroy her,
    she never ceases to strive
    for she's never seen the sun.




    Submitted on 2006-02-16 14:28:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it can really hurt to expose ourselves...in more ways than one--but eventually we all want to see the sun...we all want to grow in its light...even if it is painful at first...

    this could be about sickness, could be about shyness, could be about resolve to change a bad situation....to escape...
    so tightly sealed within, opening up causes intense pain...and perhaps even after we open up...the sun could burn us with more.

    i like these short pieces...for the poet, always a reason...for the reader always a season to liken to him or herself.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-06-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Clear, concise and so very excellent. You are certainly a deft hand when it comes to crafting words ... bravo... bravo ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-04-05 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderful job girl, the writing on this peice coneys the fragile vessel, it's determination, and the difficulty, follow instinct to self destruction or stay in the dark forever? great job, everything about it is just wonderful.
    | Posted on 2006-04-29 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      Instinct - the important thing. A lovely poem. I can interprete in so many ways... sometimes I feel it all, but it's really a human thing that blocks it.

    Hang on to the nature, lot's of great stuuf out there. Love (and congratulations - Amy I wish you both all best !!!)
    | Posted on 2006-04-05 00:00:00 | by Nightraven | [ Reply to This ]
      If we ever saw the sun fully, we would be blinded, yet we never stop striving to do that. That's what makes us human after all. I read through all your stuff, and this one appeals to me the most, because its simplicity is open to interpretation by all. Outstanding write.
    | Posted on 2006-07-02 00:00:00 | by junemarie | [ Reply to This ]
      Feels like a poem about about someone who has protected herself from the world and needs to go through the pain of that before she will see the sun again. A conflict of an internal world where on one hand she is keeping and holding on tight to that protection like a child and on the other a part of her knows the wonder of the sun and is willing to go through that pain of tearing off her petals so that the heart of her flower can experience the sun again.

    Thats what it did for me anyway!

    As always thought provokign and beautiful
    xxxxxx
    Kate
    | Posted on 2006-03-01 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      What's cool about your writes is that they're not 'overproduced'...not forced. No matter how brief or simply stated, we always get the feeling that we're witnessing a complete expression of something. Nothing to analyze or make any attempt at interpretation. They just are.

    And they feel whole.

    Its seems a very strange idea to be gluing petals shut. Does that really happen in some netherworld of perverse botany? lol

    I love the idea of blossoms as vehicles for metaphor in poetry. They seem at once so simple...yet inexhaustible in avenues of meaning...

    ...and beauty.

    This poem was beautiful.
    thanks for the read,
    see you later,
    kc
    | Posted on 2006-02-25 00:00:00 | by twacky | [ Reply to This ]
      That is a good write, It is toching. I would have to agree with todd, saying I can not critique your poem, it is well writen.
    You put alot of emotion into this poem I believe.
    | Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by dustinamoody | [ Reply to This ]
      Stunned, amazed, refreshed, inspired, crushed;) Wow, I really really really liked this poem! Calx! Yes! Gorgeous word;)

    Nothing of form or style to critique, but one little note for the very last line:

    "for she's never seen the sun" I think going full-bore and writing out "she has" keeps in the voice more than "she's", but maybe that's just me.

    Gorgeous write, thanks you so much!

    Todd
    | Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by Cigarz | [ Reply to This ]
      Amy,
    I can always be sure that when I read one of your post there will be something here to inpire me. I guess because I was a florist for years, I know just how fragile the blooms can be and how hard they are to open if they are picked before they are ready. You use the metaphor to illustrate both determination and hope.
    Glad that you posted... Hope you are enjoying the UK.
    jan
    | Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      i love the daring in this, that even though her
    petals feel glued shut, she strives to bloom so that
    she can see the sun. brava!!

    it made me think of the times when i just felt
    like i wanted to be unconscious, that the risk to
    open myself up was too much.. but because i want to
    be in the world and experience it all, even the
    possible pain involved, i risk..

    thanks for the reminder, Amy.. i smile at the
    sun today!

    much love,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      awesome, extrememly powerful and poignant, and inspirational. classic amy cobb. need I say more?

    (I know, I suck now. sorry, but if there's nothing to [censored] about, I can't [censored])

    that last line is a powderkeg
    | Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by deadndreaming | [ Reply to This ]
      ahhh, the last line takes it Amy, and this reminds of your situation right now too. Maybe a slight moratorium from writing while your world shifts?

    And then it doesn't have to be about biography either. and yet is something you won't ever stop doing even if we don't see it.

    Hope your gran gets better soon too, much love to you,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      A beautiful write.

    It touches at many level and the images are clear and crisp.

    Always the bud but never the bloom.

    Frustration
    pain
    loneliness
    dreams
    hopes
    longing

    I found all of those things in this.

    Nice job!

    Chrystine
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really short, and sweet write.
    I feel closed off from the world sometimes. I feel like I'm glued into this little town and I need to escape before I go INSANE. lol
    I can really relate to this piece. The comparison of the calyx and the girl is great especially when you end it "for she's never seen the sun". :) Great piece hun.
    Glad to know you are writing.
    Take care.
    Hugs!

    -blt
    | Posted on 2006-02-18 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      i haven't read anything you've written in a long time, you were one of the one's I admired when i came to this site, nearly two years ago almost and this is the type of writes of yours i always loved. something so small yet with such impact and grace, truely beautiful. that's all i really have on this.

    later
    skilless
    | Posted on 2006-02-19 00:00:00 | by Skillessbasterd | [ Reply to This ]
      welll very clean write .. seems very simple but with a lot of meaning and emotions that why i like this writing and your writings ...
    well keep on writng and please check out my writing i posted new ones..
    take care !
    and peace !
    Victor!
    | Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      i don't think i could ever get sick of your writing...the simplistic yet complexity of each of your writes always shines ...and makes them interesting and worth reading...and as usual your emotion through your words is expressed perfectly...keep it up cuddles...purps
    | Posted on 2006-04-05 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]


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