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Letter to whom it may concern


Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
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Words: 92
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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comments..it's for someone, i wrote it before he apologized but i still think it's good so tell me what u think


Letter to whom it may concern



It's kinda funny how u lie
and how i believe u
how somehow i can't breathe
it's like i need u

why do i still like u
and why would u hurt me
i should've listened to my friends
'cause u don't deserve me

the feeling in my heart
the cousin to pain
it's what happens when u love someone
who doesn't love u the same

was i just a girl to fuck
or a girl to show
doesn't matter 'cause somehow
i gotta learn to let u go




Submitted on 2006-02-16 16:06:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  ah...well. This is just so true. Sometimes, it's strange how people hurt you the most when they are so loved. And many times taking you for granted.

Good job at this poem. It's venting out but it potrays the fact quite easily.
| Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]
  i know exactly how you feel...i went through the same thing with an old boyfriend and i still love him and want to be with him even if he didn't apologize... sometimes we can't help the way we feel...keep writing you have great talent...i'll watch for you
~siara
| Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by poetry chica | [ Reply to This ]
  I think you have a good poem here. Short and simple, those are to of favorite things about a poem. I must say that I come from a belief that the "F" word never enhances a poem. I would strongly suggest that you re-work that line and think of something creative other than going for the sensational value of one word.
| Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by Double Happy | [ Reply to This ]
  hey Danni, this was good. i like the feeling and meaning behind it and the point that was mad: guys can be jackasses...i insulted myself, but ok. or atleast, thats what i got out of it. i like how you used "u" instead of "you", it makes it look just like a real letter and gave the added effect, good thinking. dont you just hate when everyone says "you have good talent, dont stop writing"? i know i do, so i dont say it. instead i say: freakin sweet, i loved this, you rock! oh wait, we can't say that either, but w/e.

well Danni, this was great. i'm going to review some more of your stuff tommorrow, so peace for now.

~Zach~
| Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by insphered soul | [ Reply to This ]
  this is the best poem of ur's that i've read today and it is going onto my fave list. the flow lasted the whole time! great job. i'm glad u too made up.
| Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  eh y i think it is a very good writing but .. yyou have distractos as the use of "u" instead of you .. and things like that ...
and i think you can do it better..
with nothing more to say ..
please .. if you have a chance take a look to my writing please
take care!
and peace and love!
Victor!
| Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]


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