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The Depths

Author: poetry chica
ASL Info:    17/f/usa
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Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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i don't know...i'm just depressed lately

The Depths

I don’t wanna think
I don’t wanna breathe
Teetering on the brink
Of wanting to be

Dive into the depths
The depths of my sorrows
Where my secrets are kept
My own secret hollow

You wonder where is this place?
It’s a place inside my head
An area of peace and space
A place where thoughts are dead

So turn away from my pain
Act like you don’t see
Like an umbrella in the rain
Shield yourself from me

I’ll hide my pain from you
Never let you see
Keep you from what’s true
Be who you want me to be

Though inside it will kill
At least we’ll be together
Bend me to your will
Try to make me better

Submitted on 2006-02-16 17:30:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i know this post is an expression of how you feel. But from a third person point of view it seems that you have some confused/contradictive feelings about your "Depths". As i read your words i could definetly relate and understand what your "depths"consist of. seems to be a lack of self worth or esteem. Depression i think could actually be defined by your first stanza-
"I don’t wanna think
I don’t wanna breathe
Teetering on the brink
Of wanting to be"

its ironic that the place in your head is filled with dead thoughts and space. but at the same time its peaceful. i can relate.

Pain is love some say, so being who he wants you to be makes sense, but deep down you make your own experiences through the choices you make, conscious choices you make so...

and it doesnt really make sense for you to kill your insides just to be with someone you love.

MY point of view is my own, im sure you can relate on some of my points but im sure most of this doesnt make sense. but thats why i like this site..

| Posted on 2006-05-18 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]

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