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    dots Submission Name: The Depthsdots

    Author: poetry chica
    ASL Info:    17/f/usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 93/98/34
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       i don't know...i'm just depressed lately

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    dotsThe Depthsdots

    I donít wanna think
    I donít wanna breathe
    Teetering on the brink
    Of wanting to be

    Dive into the depths
    The depths of my sorrows
    Where my secrets are kept
    My own secret hollow

    You wonder where is this place?
    Itís a place inside my head
    An area of peace and space
    A place where thoughts are dead

    So turn away from my pain
    Act like you donít see
    Like an umbrella in the rain
    Shield yourself from me

    Iíll hide my pain from you
    Never let you see
    Keep you from whatís true
    Be who you want me to be

    Though inside it will kill
    At least weíll be together
    Bend me to your will
    Try to make me better

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      i know this post is an expression of how you feel. But from a third person point of view it seems that you have some confused/contradictive feelings about your "Depths". As i read your words i could definetly relate and understand what your "depths"consist of. seems to be a lack of self worth or esteem. Depression i think could actually be defined by your first stanza-
    "I donít wanna think
    I donít wanna breathe
    Teetering on the brink
    Of wanting to be"

    its ironic that the place in your head is filled with dead thoughts and space. but at the same time its peaceful. i can relate.

    Pain is love some say, so being who he wants you to be makes sense, but deep down you make your own experiences through the choices you make, conscious choices you make so...

    and it doesnt really make sense for you to kill your insides just to be with someone you love.

    MY point of view is my own, im sure you can relate on some of my points but im sure most of this doesnt make sense. but thats why i like this site..

    | Posted on 2006-05-18 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]

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