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you wouldn't would you

Author: bloodied_angel
ASL Info:    15/Female/Oklahoma
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Class/Type: Rant /Depressed
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i dont know just comment

you wouldn't would you

who can count the stars in the sky
who could have told her she would live to die
who could have explained to her his warm imbrase
who would have told her of the look on moms face

would you have told the little girl
that her parents would die
and her life would unfirle

would you have told her that as daddys little girl,
that she would see daddy drunk and passed out on the floor

would you have told her as mommys little angel
that mommy would leave her in the arms of another

would you tell the six year old with the baby doll in her arms
that those arms would be scared arms by the time she was 12

would you explain to her a over dose
and thats her best friend would eventulay do

would you have explaind a broken heart
being left alone by a man who still hold her heart

would you have told me then my white knight would come
wisk me away and save me from my self
could you have told me it would be okay if you knew what was comming to me

i now that even if i knew peace would come
i probly could not look at my youger self
and tell me ill be ok

Submitted on 2006-02-16 19:04:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Except for the first stanza, which doesn't seem to add much, this is pretty good. I don't think you should bother trying to rhyme it though. It doesn't need it. A very good message, expressed well. That's all you need really.
| Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by herrbench | [ Reply to This ]
  wow..this is a really powerful poem. i like it a lot i think you did a great job. it really brings out an emotion from me, the reader.
| Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by Roula | [ Reply to This ]

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