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    dots Submission Name: even angels will crydots
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    Author: bloodied_angel
    ASL Info:    15/Female/Oklahoma
    Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 79/119/44
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 729
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 773



    Description:
       for my Bf to whom im engaged


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    dotseven angels will crydots
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    and they say me that even angels would cry
    if they understood the pain i hold
    but that dosent help my aching heart
    telling me that lifes really that bad

    tell me it will be okay
    and i know it will some day
    as of now i am content
    for one angel understood
    he did not cry for me
    but came to earth in the form of a man
    he held me tight and released my pain

    behold my angel masked as a demon
    with intention pure but misunderstood
    he hold his truth in his eyes
    and his grace hes given me

    no more tears
    no more pain
    no more blood that stains
    no more slits
    no more filts
    no longer damned for my sins




    Submitted on 2006-02-16 19:17:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I don't like it but whatever floats your boat. The beginning begins off to weird and your "No More"etc. kills whatever flow you try to had going on thier. The great things are you use in imagery and your metaphors. I think u can do better though because you did have something going you just need to learn to shape it.
    | Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by silly monkey | [ Reply to This ]
      I get it but dont get it... it sounds more like a story.. it creates a vivid image, but its really good. Maybe look over it time to time and see if you see what were saying... maybe you can read mine called "Heart"
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by Linkins_knot | [ Reply to This ]


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