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even angels will cry


Author: bloodied_angel
ASL Info:    15/Female/Oklahoma
Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 79 /119 /44
Words: 140
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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for my Bf to whom im engaged


even angels will cry



and they say me that even angels would cry
if they understood the pain i hold
but that dosent help my aching heart
telling me that lifes really that bad

tell me it will be okay
and i know it will some day
as of now i am content
for one angel understood
he did not cry for me
but came to earth in the form of a man
he held me tight and released my pain

behold my angel masked as a demon
with intention pure but misunderstood
he hold his truth in his eyes
and his grace hes given me

no more tears
no more pain
no more blood that stains
no more slits
no more filts
no longer damned for my sins




Submitted on 2006-02-16 19:17:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I don't like it but whatever floats your boat. The beginning begins off to weird and your "No More"etc. kills whatever flow you try to had going on thier. The great things are you use in imagery and your metaphors. I think u can do better though because you did have something going you just need to learn to shape it.
| Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by silly monkey | [ Reply to This ]
  I get it but dont get it... it sounds more like a story.. it creates a vivid image, but its really good. Maybe look over it time to time and see if you see what were saying... maybe you can read mine called "Heart"
| Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by Linkins_knot | [ Reply to This ]


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