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How Lucky I'am


Author: silly monkey
ASL Info:    17/ female/ somewhere
Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 83 /103 /32
Words: 117
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Another poem about my baby :D


How Lucky I'am



It takes only one glance
To be reminded how lucky I'am
No girl in the world could have a better man
One who still loves me
- at my worst and at my best
Someone who sees through me faults
- and is not quick to judge
A man who is faithful
- to keeping just one girl
One who wont get embaress
-to scream out I love you
Someone who is'nt shy
- to being true to himself
A man who can respect
- the woman he has at hand
It takes one glance
To be reminded how lucky I'am
No girl in the world could have a better man.




Submitted on 2006-02-16 21:00:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  nice poem it is great, stays on topic the whole way through. Looks like you have someone and that is great so in the end let it be great.

Like the way you put the title, and the way this whole thing flowed.
| Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by Gmann | [ Reply to This ]
  its not that your lucky ..
leave that for me
for i have a girl
who cares about me

not one to judge my faws
not one to hate my mistakes
no
a girl who sees who i am
and what i have to give

your the reason i wake up
your the reason i smile

im lucky to have you
why?
theres so much to tell
the way you make me smile
the way you make me feel
the way you bring laughter
and it never seems to fade

i coud go on for hours
but is running late
to make it quite short
IIIIIIIII LLLLLLLLOOOOOOOVVVVE YOOOOOUU
now
then
forever
| Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by UnHoLyPoPe | [ Reply to This ]


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