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My one true Love


Author: star_on_fire22
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Words: 139
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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I wrote this in Creative writing class.. but the ending sucked so i changed it a little.. if you guys dont like it i will change the ending to the original way and you guys can decide which is better... i had to write about a feeling, mine was Anticipation. and of course, it is about reading books.. tell me if its any good or not..

Ashley

just remember i wrote this in only 15 minutes.. we had a time limit so it may not be the best.


My one true Love



Page after crisp page,
feverishly eating up every word,
The more i read,
The more i want to know.

Will everything turn out for the better?
Will something dramatic happen?

My life is on hold.
Time stands still,
as i am sucked into this other dimension.

I am completely engrossed into the storyline.
I can barely wait to reach the end,
when i will finally find out if things happen like i predicted,
or worse.
Every emotion that the characters feel,
I match them.

When they smile,
I smile,
When they laugh
I laugh,
And when they cry,
I cry as well.

Their lives become mine.

I hold on to the edge of my seat in anticipation
Until I read that fianl word
and everything just falls into place.




Submitted on 2006-02-16 21:34:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Interesting poem. I like the theme of it all, very rhythmic and crisp word choice. Well, that may be an OVERTHETOP description, but it certainly does fit. Good job on this one, but try writing about more exotic subjects, but keep up the same creativity you have exibited on this piece.

Bill- (Yes I am Back)
| Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]


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