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    dots Submission Name: Guardian Angeldots

    Author: Darkstar9500
    ASL Info:    18/male/Missouri
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 39/56/19
    Words: 49
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
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       This was when I was thinking about how to help my girlfriend. I decided all I can do is protect her.

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    dotsGuardian Angeldots

    Can a human be
    an angel to another?
    Make the world feel grand?
    Enclose them in your white wings
    in this dark Valley of Tears.

    A human must be
    a white light unto themselves.
    Don't be an angel.
    Be a guardian angel.
    They walk, you guard from darkness

    Submitted on 2006-02-17 00:17:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is pretty cool. I like your simple expression of yourself. No need to long draw out anything. You cut to the chase and made your point. I guess I like this more because usually I don't enjoy a lot of short poems cuz they leave a lot out, but you did well in explaining yourself. I would say it sound more like words of advice to me, but you did say that this was what you could do to protect her, so maybe it is advice, to yourself maybe. Nice poem, keep up the good work.

    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by Nashataku | [ Reply to This ]
      It seems like you really want to help your girlfriend, thats so sweet. This poem reminds me of your other one, which is cool. I started to think about it right away. Can a human be a guardian angel for another human. Thats very interesting. I liked this poem it made me think about..life. Great job
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]
      it is so fantastic that you want to help your girlfriend. i like how you put so much thought and feeling into this.

    you did a wonderful job with this. so little words, so much meaning. i like i like i like
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by hayl | [ Reply to This ]
      well there surely is a void when we talk of imagery n style. bt there is an elemnt that makes the poem to b lvd, may b yr genuine urge to help yr gf is visible and shouts loud. cannoot term it an xellent piece, bt niethr is it bad.
    keep up!
    do visit my poetry.
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by wasif | [ Reply to This ]
      sometimes, you have no idea how much you have already helped me babe. you really have. i know that no matter how many times i tell you that, you wont believe it, but god, its so true. you've gotten me through this year; i couldnt have done it without you. i mean that. you know all that ive been through, and youve been there besides me every second of it. true, your not nathan, but i need you right now... even more than i need him. shocking, i know, but so true. i love you rick!
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by BreakAndFall | [ Reply to This ]

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