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    dots Submission Name: Travisdots
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    Author: T.O.S.R.
    ASL Info:    16/F/Utah
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 53/53/15
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Longing
    Total Views: 152
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 883



    Description:
       Just a little something I typed while in computer class about my boyfriend... *Shrugs* Nothing special or formal.


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    dotsTravisdots
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    -It's cute how you leave your usual group of friends to sit near me in class.
    -It's sweet how you don't swear much when it's just me and you
    -It's depressing that you were everything Alysha expected you to be, but you were acting so much different when she met you
    -It's sad to think that I may not know you the way I thought
    -It's scary that I may not be able to convince you of the LDS faith
    -It's confusing that, even though your words are rude, I still feel a true kind-heartedness behind them...

    It's all these things wrapped into one, and I don't know what to think...

    -I want to convince you
    -I want to impress you
    -I want to know you
    -I want to feel you
    -I want to love you...

    Please let me..?






    Submitted on 2006-02-17 10:31:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked that a lot!
    Those words were written from the heart.

    Many of us probably remember feeling something like that at some stage... you have put it into words quite simply and with good effect.

    Good luck with your further writing!

    Psyve
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by Psyve | [ Reply to This ]
      It sounds like you are very confused. I don't think you can make a person serve God. And ask yourself why dod you need to impress him? You never really know a person completely and it takes time. You want to feel him...I'm leaving that alone. lol. What's stoping you from loving him? I think you raised some questions only you can anwser, not him. Good luck.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-02-18 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful
    Very Beautiful
    In this poem I see someone who is despertly trying to fill the empty void in there Life with Love
    Never Give Up
    Love will come to You
    And when it does it will be mucjh more rewarding then Love you searched for
    God Bless
    Ron


    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-02-18 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]



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