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    dots Submission Name: Cold and Lonely Nightsdots
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    Author: papaj
    Elite Ratio:    2.33 - 3/5/4
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 157
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    dotsCold and Lonely Nightsdots
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    Children crying in the night
    To sounds of merriment
    Mother appears to quiet their fears
    With a single bag of chips

    The sounds are loud then muffled
    As the door swings wide then shuts
    The people there don’t seem to care
    The drunkards and the sluts

    The cold of night keeps coming
    Through the one thin blanket shared
    The younger child’s cries beguile
    The older if he dared

    To search and tell the Mother
    Of the cold consuming fright
    Yet like before, there’s only more
    Of the cold and endless night

    These nights that pass, to the child
    Are longer than the days
    Of warm sunshine and happy times
    The anguish of it stays

    The child now grown to man
    Is strong and knows no frights
    Still deep inside he tries to hide
    From cold and lonely nights




    Submitted on 2006-02-17 10:42:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow this ones is really good.i enjoyed it.tis going on my favorites list...anyway i'll check b/k later to read more.keep writing.
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by LostInYerTears | [ Reply to This ]
      wow that was great, i mean everything, its on my favs, i really liked the flow and sullen attitude in it! well done, i really felt for you on that
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by ATS | [ Reply to This ]



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