Description: My friend latentlylyrical gave me great advice and help with this poem.
Asking the Impossible -------------------------------------------
Asking the Impossible
In every century, I ask for the unattainable
why demand the mundane?
Fossilized turtle shells playing the Beatles
A second sun eclipsing the moon forever
Any religion that does not kill in the name of
Waterfalls going uphill
Clouds forming compassionate wisdom to read each day
Snow flakes sprinkling rainbow colors
Another century has passed and gone
the world moves on
with my requests going unanswered
unheard or unheeded
Either I am a fool or my wishes are being denied purposely
Forget the impossible and the years wasted
allowing days to vanish
Time has proven to be diabolical when everlasting
is the lesson one learned
those heartless minutes scar deeply
The Author of life has written my ending today;
the bell tolls
I shall not forgo another second
without telling her
She is my heart and the only real possibility
I have ever known
The Author of life has written my ending today; the bell tolls I shall not forgo another second without telling her She is my heart and the only real possibility I have ever known
This is just absolutely beautiful , --I loved the original images througout and the poignant message of longing and love. Above all thoughI loved the ending---it melts like Belgian chocolate and is just soooooo memorable. I know this isnt a very constructive comment--better luck next time [LOL]---- I love it just as it is. Thanks Ed Silver
I love this it has a beautiful feeling to it and is very well written. This is a very passionate piece of writing and i am so glad that i had chance to read it :)..i am adding this to favs and will be back to read more asap :)
Sometimes I think"love" IS asking the impossible.. but that's what makes it so desirable. Had to read this a couple of times but it gave me a good feeling while doing so. I like the first line where you ask for the unattainable.. and then proceed to describe certain (impossible?) things. Loved the part about the clouds and wisdom.. (that has ME wishing for it). and.. it would be so cool to see colorful snowflakes falling. Though this is a light poem I get a deeper meaning.. perhaps that we shouldn't waste time but look for the impossible in every moment.. and grasp the love we are given.
That was a very impactful line there Mr. Deputy. That one line could have been a poem all in itself. For the meaning that one line holds can be taken in many ways!
Either she ended your story in a bad way....or she ended it in a fairy tale sort of matter.
I have always been intrigued by your wisdom with words and your ability to bring forth emotions that many can lose within themselves. You can give the person that feeling as a remembrance.
This is really quite beautiful You ask a lot of questions that seemingly have no answer and then BOOM You answer you own questions by turning to your heart That is really beautiful God Bless Your Friend Ron
Great! That was a terrific read, you have a great way of using words. I offer no critique for none be deserved. All I can tell you is that was a great write.
I loved the imagery of this. And your flow was good. I personally did not connect with this poem but I can see it is well written. And I find no faults with it. Nice job.
Forget the impossible and the years wasted allowing days to vanish Time has proven to be diabolical when everlasting is the lesson one learned those heartless minutes scar deeply
wow... very poignant, my friend.. it has the feel of having lived for ages. we do wish for the impossible sometimes.. i love the line
In every century, I ask for the unattainable why demand the mundane?
and your ending wraps it up so neatly, speaking your love now, what is possible in this very moment.
well done, my friend. it is a pleasure to read you again.
Having imopossible hopes and dreams then resorting to the possible and realistic may seem like settling for less. but the way you put it makes it seem like the loved one is an impossible dream that can be reached. it places the 'she' you talk about in a place of honour. very original well written even a bit humerous and playful you stand out from the crowd - i'll be looking out for more of your work as this is the first piece i've read.
I really enjoyed this write, Ed. So full of things we all wish for and know will never happen. Kind of like "what do you want for the birthday, Carol" "Peace in the world, of course" Kind of sad really but all too true. This poem flowed very smoothly for me. Easy to read and understand. Are you a fool to wish? I think not and I dont think you do either. The last stanza is shear beauty. Loved it. Carol
Submission Name: Asking the Impossible
