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Asking the Impossible


Author: edthepoet
ASL Info:    47-m-Pa
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Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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My friend latentlylyrical gave me great advice and help with this poem.


Asking the Impossible



Asking the Impossible

In every century, I ask for the unattainable
why demand the mundane?

Fossilized turtle shells playing the Beatles
A second sun eclipsing the moon forever
Any religion that does not kill in the name of
Waterfalls going uphill
Clouds forming compassionate wisdom to read each day
Snow flakes sprinkling rainbow colors

Another century has passed and gone
the world moves on
with my requests going unanswered
unheard or unheeded
Either I am a fool or my wishes are being denied purposely

Forget the impossible and the years wasted
allowing days to vanish
Time has proven to be diabolical when everlasting
is the lesson one learned
those heartless minutes scar deeply



The Author of life has written my ending today;
the bell tolls
I shall not forgo another second
without telling her
She is my heart and the only real possibility
I have ever known

Edward K. Deputy






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  The Author of life has written my ending today;
the bell tolls
I shall not forgo another second
without telling her
She is my heart and the only real possibility
I have ever known



This is just absolutely beautiful , --I loved the original images througout and the poignant message of longing and love. Above all thoughI loved the ending---it melts like Belgian chocolate and is just soooooo memorable. I know this isnt a very constructive comment--better luck next time [LOL]---- I love it just as it is.
Thanks Ed
Silver
| Posted on 2006-11-28 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
  This is an incredible poem! Don't know how I missed it but don't seem to have commented previously.

I love the last stanza - it's beautiful, pure and simple. From the heart which makes it undoubtedly sacred...

You've done a wonderful job with this!

Keep writing and stay in touch.
| Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]
  I love this it has a beautiful feeling to it and is very well written. This is a very passionate piece of writing and i am so glad that i had chance to read it :)..i am adding this to favs and will be back to read more asap :)
| Posted on 2006-10-02 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
  I cannot think of what to write on poetry like this as it feels so beautiful and perfect.

However I am unsure of the last paragraph.
Who is "she": Your lover? The author?(but then it should be authoress!)

I especially enjoyed the first 3 stanzas.

What about:

"Any religion that does not kill in the name of"

Is that incomplete? Or perhaps there should be a fill-in-the-blank there!

Keep writing! Always!
| Posted on 2006-08-06 00:00:00 | by albery rinash | [ Reply to This ]
  Sometimes I think"love" IS asking the impossible.. but that's what makes it so desirable.
Had to read this a couple of times but it gave me a good feeling while doing so.
I like the first line where you ask for the unattainable.. and then proceed to describe certain (impossible?) things.
Loved the part about the clouds and wisdom.. (that has ME wishing for it).
and.. it would be so cool to see colorful snowflakes falling.
Though this is a light poem I get a deeper meaning.. perhaps that we shouldn't waste time but look for the impossible in every moment.. and grasp the love we are given.

Nice work, Ed.
I enjoyed!
| Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
  The Author of life has written my ending today

That was a very impactful line there Mr. Deputy. That one line could have been a poem all in itself. For the meaning that one line holds can be taken in many ways!

Either she ended your story in a bad way....or she ended it in a fairy tale sort of matter.

I have always been intrigued by your wisdom with words and your ability to bring forth emotions that many can lose within themselves. You can give the person that feeling as a remembrance.

Great job!

Much love,

Li Li
| Posted on 2006-04-10 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really quite beautiful
You ask a lot of questions that seemingly have no answer and then
BOOM
You answer you own questions by turning to your heart
That is really beautiful
God Bless
Your Friend
Ron
| Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  This is wonderful, ed!
I really enjoyed the rainbow sprinkles of snowflakes and the reading of wise clouds.

Goodstuff, my friend.
| Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
  I have always enjoyed reading your work, you have a wonderful way of making me think, and it is appreciated.

I hope all is well with you Ed.

Until next read

Denise
| Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]
  Great! That was a terrific read, you have a great way of using words. I offer no critique for none be deserved. All I can tell you is that was a great write.
| Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by dustinamoody | [ Reply to This ]
  I loved the imagery of this. And your flow was good. I personally did not connect with this poem but I can see it is well written. And I find no faults with it. Nice job.

Maggie
| Posted on 2006-02-18 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  Forget the impossible and the years wasted
allowing days to vanish
Time has proven to be diabolical when everlasting
is the lesson one learned
those heartless minutes scar deeply

wow... very poignant, my friend.. it has the feel of having lived for ages. we do wish for the impossible sometimes.. i love the line

In every century, I ask for the unattainable
why demand the mundane?

and your ending wraps it up so neatly, speaking your love now, what is possible in this very moment.

well done, my friend. it is a pleasure to read you again.

peace,
~Cat
| Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
  Having imopossible hopes and dreams then resorting to the possible and realistic may seem like settling for less. but the way you put it makes it seem like the loved one is an impossible dream that can be reached. it places the 'she' you talk about in a place of honour.
very original
well written
even a bit humerous and playful
you stand out from the crowd - i'll be looking out for more of your work as this is the first piece i've read.
| Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by Jody Dean | [ Reply to This ]
  I really enjoyed this write, Ed. So full of things we all wish for and know will never happen. Kind of like "what do you want for the birthday, Carol"
"Peace in the world, of course"
Kind of sad really but all too true.
This poem flowed very smoothly for me. Easy to read and understand.
Are you a fool to wish? I think not and I dont think you do either.
The last stanza is shear beauty.
Loved it.
Carol
| Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]


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