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    dots Submission Name: The Virtual Dimensiondots
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    Author: wasif
    ASL Info:    18/m/Delhi
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 47/42/16
    Words: 241
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 153
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1551



    Description:
       this piece talks about the present where we have forgotten to wear the cloak of originality and like rats led by the Piper have given ourselves to the changes and a reality or dimension has been created which is virtual and we perhaps are puppets.


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    dotsThe Virtual Dimensiondots
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    An enigma in my mind I wish,
    A facade I usually put forth-
    Blackened by the sense of which
    Today in deepness of things, I Quote:
    'In a world of rare dimension so known,
    A dream, a thought,
    That I can call my own...

    Embodied by a baffling wit,
    Lost and incomplete, this corpse is,
    Fatous by the head it is,
    Embalming its soul bit-by-bit.
    'In this world of felonic dimension so known,
    A dream, a thought,
    That I can call my own...

    So silent my way has been,
    Like a whisper in the night sky, I feel,
    Blenching from the blizzard, i've seen.
    No wonder what pulled me in?
    From fecund to futile, today, I feel,
    'In this world of numb dimension so known,
    A dream, a thought,
    That I can call my own...

    My wishful thinking is Today, guilty,
    My words emulate the speaker,
    A mockery has it today created
    Wonder what this world needs?
    'In this world of critical dimension so known,
    A dream, a thought,
    That I can call my own...

    No more shall I say to continue,
    For you might think it, just a Poem to be.
    Regardless of the thoughtlessness in you,
    You perhaps be not be able to see,
    For in reality, I wish to Tell-
    'In this world of virtual dimension so known,
    Not a mere dream,nor a thought,
    Is present which we call our own...






    Submitted on 2006-02-17 13:00:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It had real depth. I could see the questions you were asking and the point you were trying to convey. In the world today, people dont act real, or i mean they are too critical of how other people will judge them , so they put up a front kind of. And your poem is saying that the world today has limitless possibilites, like a virtual dimension would have. thats just what i thought at least. NIce work
    | Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      This wasn't half bad. The flow could be worked on a little bit, but other than that everything was perfected. I loved the intense words you used, and all the emotion put into them. GREAT WRITE!
    Alyssa
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]



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