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    dots Submission Name: Dozen rosesdots
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    Author: Autum-Moon
    ASL Info:    15/Female/drowing
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 284/165/29
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsDozen rosesdots
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    This Roses lays,
    Wilted and gone.
    Like there love,
    That went wrong.

    This rose marked,
    By untouched love,
    Shows no angels care,
    From the world above.

    Fearing the worse,
    This rose untouched,
    This boy she loves,
    Didn't care much.

    The rose he gave her,
    To mark his care,
    Destoryed and wilted,
    Forever there.

    For every rose,
    A tear she cried,
    Another cut,
    For all the times he lied.

    A dozen roses,
    Black and red,
    Symbolize nothing,
    But the blood she shed.





    Submitted on 2006-02-17 15:55:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The rose he gave her,
    To mark his care,
    Destoryed and wilted,
    Forever there.

    u told me that i should shorten my lines but i prefer longer lines but with this one u really showed how well short lines can be used. this was really good. that stanza was my favorite although it was hard to choose. this was really good and i'm definitely putting it on my fave list.
    | Posted on 2006-02-27 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      That was a beautiful/great/awesome/wicked awesome poem. Lol. I know,that was weird.

    Have a happy face to two.
    You are an awesome writer, brillant.
    This rose marked,
    By untouched love,
    Shows no angels care,
    From the world above.

    You just had a way of putting the words all together to make it sound more than perfect. THere was a lot of emotion in it, Its so great how people can express with poems
    <<heres another.
    inkpen
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]
      this was good and thanx for the comment on rampage
    i know its long but it will be in page and book form for 2007

    great emotional write
    thanx again
    sandman
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      All i can say is WOW.I really like this poem.It doesnt have too little detail and too much its really good.In my opinion ur a very experienced writer.Im gonna add this to my favorites.Great job again.Alot of poems are on subjects like this.But thats good b.c alot of people go through stuff like this.And people like to read what they can relate to.My favorite part is

    For every rose,
    A tear she cried,
    another cut,
    for all the times he lied.

    I know exactly whats thats like.If you ever want to talk you can send me a message k?
    Great job again.

    Much Love,
    Sucidal_chick
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by suicidal_chick | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this poem a lto and i truly hope to read more by you. keep up the amazingly awesome work. i'm add ing this to my favs list

    love tina
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW! It seems like everytime I come up with a new poem, you come up with one ten times better. Oh, well. Anyways I really liked this poem, and the flow. It seems that you are as good writing depressed poems, as you are happy ones too. I really loved this, and I am going to add it to my favs!
    Alyssa
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey,

    Sweet poem. The flow and description work together.

    *Let it Flow*
    Raven
    P.s. I'll write more l8ter srry, in a rush.
    | Posted on 2006-02-18 00:00:00 | by Silent_Tears | [ Reply to This ]
      P.S. There should be spelled T-H-E-I-R in the third.

    Sorry, I forgot to add that... hehe... :) :) :) :)
    And I added this as a favorite, so if you'd like me to take it down; you can PM me. k? thanks, bye.
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by night_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      Amazing write. The flow was decent. I'd change one small thing though... (hope you don't mind...)

    "For every rose,
    A tear she cried,
    Another cut,
    Each time he lied."

    Anywayz! good rhyming and I really enjoyed it. I hope you don't mind if I add it as a favorite...?
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by night_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww. I loved this. It made me kinda sad but you kno a poem is good when it makes you feel something. I think im gonna add this to my favorites list.

    A dozen roses,
    Black and red,
    Symbolize nothing,
    But the blood she shed.

    That was my favorite part. Im gonna read more of your stuff now.

    ~Samm
    | Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by LoveToHateMe | [ Reply to This ]


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