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    dots Submission Name: a slice of crimsondots
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    Author: nightxassassin
    Elite Ratio:    1.98 - 51/43/26
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsa slice of crimsondots
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    tip toe to the window,
    to the cat behind the blinds.

    whisper to the widow,
    a meeting of two minds.

    be the first to falter,
    the night seems to clear,

    the future you will try to alter,
    your living in fear,

    feel the wind in your hair,
    let it sing; its screaming of freedom.

    its the last time to pretend to care,
    you'll see them walk away, you'll be with them.




    Submitted on 2006-02-17 16:58:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i felt like i was there too! haha.
    rhyme scheme is great, imagery is awesome. =] this is a great piece. i didnt quite understand the meaning behind it, but maybe im not supposed to, i get the feeling its one of those poems.
    The kind that no one knows what it means except the writer themselves.
    anyways, good write!
    - Michi
    | Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by _Phoenix | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! I think your poem is great. The imagery is there. I felt like I was there. I do sense some pain in your words. MM2005
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by MM2005 | [ Reply to This ]


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