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    dots Submission Name: Celestialdots
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    Author: Glassy Eyed
    ASL Info:    17/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 550/427/187
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 565
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 755



    Description:
       This is for my boyfriend...


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    dotsCelestialdots
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    When the moon rises,
    It's like it's rising and shining just to illuminate our past darkness.

    You're my moon,
    Rising into my world,
    Dispersing my darkness,
    And showering me in light.

    When the stars shine,
    It's like looking into your eyes.

    I can see the stars in your eyes,
    And they shine and sparkle for none to see,
    But me,
    Because I see you,
    You who are so perfect and wonderous,
    It makes my heart skip beats.

    And when the sun rises,
    It's like it's rising just for you and me.
    And the warmth from it's rays,
    Reminds me of the warmth that I feel when I'm with you.




    Submitted on 2006-02-17 22:09:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      True love. I wish I could feel that poetical about my mother who just passed. I have the need to say something. Your piece was beautifully written and emotion provoking.
    well done!

    Crackwalker
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by Crackwalker | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm guessing this is for your mom. I found it...sweet? I'm not sure how to put it. I wish I could express my mom like that, dispersing my darkness..ahh,no. Shes more like at the bar since she got divorced. I think this poem is pretty good, its like you can just look deep into her eyes and see everything. Good job

    inkpen
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]


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