I do agree with DavidHirt about how its hard to judge lyrics without the music...sometimes songs are completely amazing with the music, but the lyrics make no sense to you...and vice-versa
right, back on topic. The first bit came off really clear to me...nice imagery with lines such as:
"With garments tattered My will still vigilant Boots weathered And well traveled And well trained"
it got a bit more confusing as it went on. That could be because I can be pretty dense with poetry sometimes so...you've been warned.
To me I get the image of someone who has died in battle and is looking down from the heavens and relfecting on the fight/scenes going on below and realizing that we are all people, wether emporeor or peasant, and in the end are equal...like the qoute "The king and the pawn go back in the same box" Thats the concept coming across to me
could be wrong though...
it got me thinking, and that is always a pleasure when reading poetry
I'm feeling some tension between the title of your song and the content. The image the song gives is of a Knight out against the whole world, or at least groups, while the title implies one on one confrontation. I think that you might want to address that disparity, perhaps with a new title. Other than that, I think the lyrics are strong. I'm sure the music you have them set to works well. It's hard to only judge the lyrics of a song without any music to here how they are sung.