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    dots Submission Name: Masacismdots
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    Author: DarkenedSoul
    ASL Info:    30/m/astral dreams
    Elite Ratio:    4.29 - 77/60/17
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       I'm posting this so that those of you who do not understand why people cut on themselves can gain some insight as to the reasons and thinking of those that do. I myself do not cut; but did long ago.


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    dotsMasacismdots
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    I weild my blade as an instrument of peace;
    it harms no one else.
    It helps me loose emotions bound inside,
    all the anger and pain I try to hide.
    It's cutting touch is a scream of rage.
    It's edge burns a path through my flesh;
    the pain is somehow comforting.
    Sometimes I want to cry out;
    to reach out to someone,
    but not knowing where to turn
    or who to trust robs me of my voice.
    So I sit in silent solitude
    and let my pain bleed away.




    Submitted on 2006-02-18 07:05:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      First thing, spelling. I really have no reference personally on cutting, but I do get the sense that some of your lines are a bit cliché and not really very personal. You're saying what a lot of people say they experience. Ti improve this, really get into the subject and give us some metaphors, descriptions, emotions that aren't so carbon copy.

    Thanks for sharing,

    Todd
    | Posted on 2006-02-18 00:00:00 | by Cigarz | [ Reply to This ]
      I do understand why people cut (understatement) and unfortunately I can say I can relate.. but i was wondering what 'masacism' means.
    The flow was already, the wording too, but still there are so many poems about this, and this is not original either. I posted a poem about the same them 2 days ago, and I tried to make it a bit different from all the other works , but I think I failed too. Maybe you might want to check it.

    DZ
    | Posted on 2006-02-18 00:00:00 | by Darth Zeus | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a deep write
    I too undertsnad the reasons people cut but I also like you now know there is better ways to erase the Negativity stored inside a Lonely Mind
    A very true write
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please if you get a chance take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-02-18 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you could of expounded on why cutters do what they do, or made this personal and explain why you id it in detail. It seem surfaced, for such a serious issue. I wrote a cutting poem last year myself. I never did in my life, but I had friends who had done it years ago. As one who never been through it, it was hard to write it. I liked this alot. I feel that you were brave to want to come forward and admit you had this problem. And even braver for wanting to help others understand this issue better. This was a good write.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-02-19 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]



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