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    dots Submission Name: Whitewashing the languagedots
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    Author: dreamexandra
    Elite Ratio:    5.43 - 96/87/28
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       exercise in free-writing; thus, very rough.


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    dotsWhitewashing the languagedots
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    Whitewashing the language
    Dirty four-letter words that should be
    Beautiful
    (lady chatterley’s lover on an airplane
    Wanting to taste the beautiful word
    What would the person next to me think)
    No, not think
    React
    Dirty five-letter world
    Society always reacts, ingrained brainwashed instinct of disgust
    Vagina monologues on a school night
    Tasting the word from another’s mouth
    Still not in my own
    Can I taste it on a kiss?
    Clean language? That’s clean
    Crisp
    Beautifying proper, sweet, nice—
    There’s a dirty four-letter word for you—
    They have no taste.
    They don’t—want us to taste?
    Delicious sounds too
    Sensual.
    Fear of it?
    Puritan founding remains in our prudish blood
    Yes, even if that blood comes from somewhere else
    America takes it over
    Phrases like make love, have sex—
    Wonder why you get the dirty four-letter word?
    Where action? Where passion! (seven letters but dirtier, dirtier)
    Only accompanied by gasps or laughs
    Shock of the wasp, delight of the schoolboy
    If there were no gasps there would be no laughs
    Unlikely, having crossed the threshold of adulthood
    Mature, ladylike—nice again!
    The four-letter words they cultivate,
    NICE, role, good girl, obey, dull (how beautified)
    I’d put more trust in the laughs ending first
    Yes, even in the schoolboys
    Foul-mouthed laughter—at least they remember what they want
    Deep inside
    Recognition of rebellion against wrong authority
    Motives messed up, but they see
    Something!




    Submitted on 2006-02-18 15:37:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Damn good! Two four letter words that express how I feel about this poem. Though the idea of lambasting prudish morality and censorship is not new, your treatment of it is. The question is and always has been, "Do I censor myself, or have others do it?" Will my work be acceptable?

    "React
    Dirty five letter world"

    How will our audience react? That's the key question. The opposite of love is not hate, but indifference. Is it better to repulse the audience,
    than not affect them at all?

    "The four letter words they cultivate,
    NICE, role, good girl, obey, dull (how beautified)."

    Words of sweetness with little meaning, except as control, at least the first four, which lead to the fifth, "dull". No effect! No emotion! Just NICE!

    Yes, the language gets "Whitewashed", but by whom? The writer, the editor, the publisher, or is it the quest for sales that causes the purification, in an attempt to reach a broader audience? Would anyone write passionate four-letter words, only to have it remain as a manuscript in an old trunk?

    I enjoyed your take on this issue very much. You gave us an insight to the oft crossed intersection of morality and passion. In today's terminology, "The I.R.S. was in me", having just done my taxes. Odd isn't it? it doesn't sound natural, and yet that's the phrase they use for the act. Oh well, loved your poem. It was f******awesome!

    Phil
    | Posted on 2006-02-18 00:00:00 | by phil askew | [ Reply to This ]
      Out of the mouths of babes, true honesty! It's a lost art to tickle the edges of sensuality and still smell like a rose doing so, but this work does so nicely, thank you. I didn't find it "rough" unless maybe as a diamond in the rough. Food for thought, I like it.
    | Posted on 2006-02-18 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      Amazing! I've read works like this before, but never has the writer so grasped the perfection in writing it as you seem to have achieved!
    I have to agree with Phil when he says, "Though the idea of lambasting prudish morality and censorship is not new, your treatment of it is."
    To rebel isn't new, but the way you are brutally honest about the situation, and how strong the emotion of this peice is... It's so different!

    Good job. I love it!

    ~The Original Sock Rocker~
    | Posted on 2006-02-18 00:00:00 | by T.O.S.R. | [ Reply to This ]



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