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Submission Name: Skinned Knees & Broken Hearts dots

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Author:	T.O.S.R.
ASL Info:	16/F/Utah
Elite Ratio:	4.04 - 53/53/15
Words:	184

Class/Type:	Poetry/BrokenHeart
Total Views:	143
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	1256

Description:
This is about my dad.
It's written in a childish, very structured, very rhyming, and very short form in order to help describe how I felt... Comments are greatly appreciated.

Skinned Knees & Broken Hearts dots

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Broken glass.
Unnoticed tears.
Too much whisky
and too many beers.

They say "home is where the heart is."
Well, my heart isn't here.
I wish that I could hate you,
but I still hold you dear.

Daddys should sing lullabys,
Daddys shouldn't shout.
Daddys should love Mommys,
Not kick the family out.

My bare feet are cold,
out here in the snow,
and no one truely knows,
I've finally lost my home.

I wish that I was little.
I wish Daddy didn't drink.
Because broken hearts are harder to fix
than skinned knees and lost teeth.

I wish you could see Mommy,
when she cries inside her bed.
I wish I could see you,
and what's going through your head.

I wish I had the strength,
to fill the sink one lonely night,
with your such important alcohol,
so you and Mommy wouldn't fight.

But most of all I want you to know
-I've left it for just this part-
that alcohol problems are easier to fix,
than what you've done to my heart.

<3

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  A sad poem and if true a cause for concern, for you and your Mom. You have my sympathy, I hope it all works out, but someone needs to take action. Alcoholism destoys more than just the alcoholic, it is the family surrounding him that suffers the most. It will take a facing up to the problem by the alcoholic to get things moving in the right direction. There are help groups, organizations for families of drinkers. There is help, but one must confront the problem head on. Denial never works.

I hope you or someone else can get the help this situation will require. Good luck.

Phil
| Posted on 2006-02-18 00:00:00 | by phil askew | [ Reply to This ]
  wow,thats intence.i loved how evry word flowed so well..and im extremly sorry about what happend to u and ur family.i havent gone through something like that but i almost did.and yea it also sux cause it happens alot.
back to the poem,it sounded well thought out,and i think u should show it to ur dad if u havent already.
| Posted on 2006-02-18 00:00:00 | by _:insane2sane:_ | [ Reply to This ]
  through out this poem i really senced what you were going thru at that time.
i can understand how this can tear families apart because my mother was an alcaholic. she would leave us by ourselves while she went to the bar. it was hard, u know.
its especially hard on the kids who have to endure the abuse and parents fighting all the time.
i wish the best for you and your family. and that someday youll be able to forgive your father for the pain he caused you.
thanks for sharing. later.
-sarah.
| Posted on 2006-02-18 00:00:00 | by vohomegirl | [ Reply to This ]
  A touchin poem. Truly alcohol can destroy more than one's health. It can destroy families. One thought it can pass time, but in your case your father just ley you and your mother pass into the coldness of the snow. My sympathies...Hope everything would be better.
| Posted on 2006-02-18 00:00:00 | by wingpen07 | [ Reply to This ]
  But most of all I want you to know
-I've left it for just this part-
that alcohol problems are easier to fix,
than what you've done to my heart.

The last stanza's a killer. The good sort, I mean. :P I'm really sad to know about your dad... so sorry to hear about it. It's strange how something as simple as a drink could bring about how many complications, isn't it? I always think that alcohol - among other things - brings out the 'beast' within all of us. Loosened chains. Things like alcoholism just rid us of our human reason, our rational thinking, our sense. But if there's ever anything that would put that beast back into its cage, I'd have to say that the people who can do that would be the closest around him/her. Family, close friends. You.

Once again, I'm sorry to know about your dad. I hope things will get better for you.
| Posted on 2006-02-19 00:00:00 | by zhi wei | [ Reply to This ]
  Outstanding
this write really hit a nerve in me
I have lived thru this life
Alcohol and drugs of any kind not only destroy you but the people around you
Thank You for Sharing this very important write
God Bless
Ron
| Posted on 2006-02-19 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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