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    dots Submission Name: Love medots
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    Author: Poetic
    ASL Info:    21/Female/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    7.94 - 78/39/19
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 210
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    Description:
       This is a jumbled up mess of things that have been floating around in my head for days now, unfortunately, this is the first time i've had a chance to get them down, so i'm sure this will be all over the place, and will need to be revised, but i figured i would go ahead and post it as is... and see what everyone's opinion is on it before i change anything. Also, i'm not sure what to call it, not sure if the tital i have chosen will fit with the poem, so please, any advice on this will help!


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    You walked into my life,
    and showed me things i didnt know.
    You reached for my hand, touched my heart,
    and for the first time made me feel whole.

    Now i'm all wrapped up,
    constantly thinking of you.
    Wondering when i'll see you again,
    wondering what we'll do.

    I love the way you look at me,
    I love the way you smile,
    Feeling your hand touching mine,
    makes all the hard times seem worth while

    I love to feel you against me,
    Your skin upon my skin.
    I want to make sweet love to you,
    until the sun comes up, and goes down again.

    I know what I mean, but cant say it,
    The thoughts are so jumbled.
    You come around, my guard goes down,
    then my knee's get weak and i crumble.

    I want to stand on roof tops,
    and confess my love for you,
    But more than that or anything else,
    I hope you will love me too...







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    ||| Comments |||
      i don't know what you should change~but its so loving
    and sweet~a wonderful poem~
    | Posted on 2006-11-16 00:00:00 | by ms.v | [ Reply to This ]
      Personally I wouldn't change anything about it. It's straight from your thoughts, and felt from the heart. I would leave it as is. It's a beautiful write, and you have a great talent =]
    x poetic harmony x
    | Posted on 2006-09-18 00:00:00 | by Poétic Harmonie | [ Reply to This ]
      love is a static thing, kind of up and kind of down. Exasperated and nobody really gets it. Everyone interprets it different ways. And I think the way you wrote it you wanted it to be read that way. So, I say don't change it. It evoked some feeling and gave up what you wanted to be seen through your eyes. Love makes you blind sometimes, but keeps you strong. Don't ever forget that. It'll keep you sane,
    | Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by Brwnsknsam05 | [ Reply to This ]
      Love is somthing ain't it? I think it gives us all that good feeling of euphoria.... expecially when they love you back. I liked it... I find it hard to write about the good things in life so..... beautiful job.
    | Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      This is awesome. I feel this way about someone. What an intense feeling this is. To love some one and have them love you back. The feeling of them being around, thier touch. Just the thought of them makes you feel so much love.
    | Posted on 2006-02-19 00:00:00 | by nasuka | [ Reply to This ]
      That poem relates to me rite now. Real good stanzas, nice words in the rite spot. The 3rd stanza's my favorite, becuz i wrote that in one of my other poems( but not listed in here). Keep writing! :)
    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by Msangel | [ Reply to This ]



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