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    dots Submission Name: The Prophecydots
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    Author: Darkstar9500
    ASL Info:    18/male/Missouri
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 39/56/19
    Words: 29
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 671
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 190



    Description:
       This is a prophecy me and my girlfriend (BreakandFall) wrote for our role play, "Anywhere but Home."


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    dotsThe Prophecydots
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    Blood of a god
    Bone of a mortal
    From forest comes the Key
    To a new world
    Friend of the Foe
    Defending the Key
    Guardian against all
    Unseen evil




    Submitted on 2006-02-18 22:19:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      not sure what its about really

    Defending the Key
    that line maybe should be changed because the word key repeating after such a short amount of time takes away from it

    you obviosly know the "super natural" and spiritual aspect of poetry...i mean its not offent u see one that starts with the word god in the first line....unless ur reading a stupid prayer book then its all oh holly one ect....yuk i like ur stuff much better its just dark enough but still has like hope i guess behind it good job

    Trevor...~
    | Posted on 2006-05-04 00:00:00 | by goomaster03 | [ Reply to This ]
      not sure what its about really

    Defending the Key
    that line maybe should be changed because the word key repeating after such a short amount of time takes away from it

    you obviosly know the "super natural" and spiritual aspect of poetry...i mean its not offent u see one that starts with the word god in the first line....unless ur reading a stupid prayer book then its all oh holly one ect....yuk i like ur stuff much better its just dark enough but still has like hope i guess behind it good job

    Trevor...~
    | Posted on 2006-05-04 00:00:00 | by goomaster03 | [ Reply to This ]
      I rread it over a couple times. I am afraid It left me confused. I don't think I get the part about "the key". So sorry to be negative, but I think anopther stanza would clear things up for me.

    Crackwalker
    | Posted on 2006-02-18 00:00:00 | by Crackwalker | [ Reply to This ]
      i had to read it a couple of times also, nothing in the poem really graged me, it was a bit vague. i kept thinking it sounds like something youd here at the beginning of the beastmaster or a similar show
    | Posted on 2006-02-19 00:00:00 | by sinjen | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a little short, cut off. There is so much more to the story that could be added! Just think about it, let your mind go and flow into the subject, it could be breath taking only if more thought and time were put into it!
    | Posted on 2006-02-19 00:00:00 | by nasuka | [ Reply to This ]


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