I would advise you not to keep this form of writing up. I think you were on to something with your imagery on how bad loneliness is, but you fail to use a question mark with "where will you hide my friend" and that was the dramatic part that sealed the whole poem. I think using letters in place of words also hindered your poem from standing out and wowing the reader as you had planned. All the pauses were not needed. This has the makings of a very good poem if you edit this. Right now it is good, but it falls short of it's potential to be so much better. I'm merely trying to help out. You don't have to listen to me.