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    dots Submission Name: CulturalReferences&DiseaseMgntdots
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    Author: FrankBlissett
    Elite Ratio:    5.17 - 206/191/66
    Words: 269
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Here are two poems - "Cultural References" and "Disease Management". The primary thing I am looking for is which of the two leaves the biggest impression on you (in a good way). Any further critique on either poem is welcome and encouraged.


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    Cultural References

    I am a goldfish --
    Living in a crystal palace resplendent, on my love's bookshelf.
    Between Dostoevsky's "Notes From The Underground" and a volume of Pasternak.
    (It's already March.
    Still weeping, take ink --
    Black spring still burning)

    How I wish she would slide me into her pond,
    Where I could swim back and forth within gentle waters.
    When she cooled her feet,
    I would weave between and around --
    Tickling at every turn.
    When she beckoned,
    I would float to the lotus blossoms
    Where she could brush her hands across my back;
    There I would rest,
    Listening to my Lewti read ancient Buddhist scripture.

    I would listen as she spoke of enlightenment and nirvana,
    Watch as she stretched and retired to her lime tree bower.
    Surrounded by sweet blossoms,
    She would stitch the embroidered cloths of the Gods
    With golden and silver light.
    This tapestry she would pin to the heavens as a sky
    While I wove my hopes into a rug and threw it down before her.
    Thus she would travel through life --
    Gently treading on my dreams while reaching to the heavens for hers.


    Disease Management

    In medical school,
    The first thing you learn is "chronic versus acute".
    It's like love and lust.

    Lust is a rapid churning of the stomach.
    You become a different person --
    The experience can be quite memorable.

    Love sneaks up on you though.
    Like a fog it becomes you,
    And lingers forever as a hint of nausea.







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