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    dots Submission Name: Crows and Sparrowsdots
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    Author: Rue
    ASL Info:    16/F/the dark side
    Elite Ratio:    4.54 - 244/182/44
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 878
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       My my, who writes such cryptic, underlying things? Sparrow prints do touch the sands... and there's echos of her typing hands. She left a message, clear as day, and hopes Crow finds it before like... May.


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    There are, unexplored surfaces
    And new things to go see
    New places to cartograph,
    more evil to set free.
    No, this is not trickery,
    For there's social tangles to weave,
    And I know that you've got something more,
    hidden up your orange sleeve.
    So gather close around my fire,
    And take up your "quill and ink."
    Who best to mold the minds of brilliance?
    Just you and me, I think.
    How can you deny the temptation,
    Of all those beautiful finds?
    The moon will be shining from above,
    On Sylths, small farms, and greek cities,
    Common as white crested doves.
    There's so much new to be inspired,
    And the computer screen's not tired,
    So how about a new beginning?




    Submitted on 2006-02-19 10:27:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hahahahaha sorry, Rue, I laughed all through this, it was crazy/funny yet a bit sad too.

    Poetically, it was neat! I can't think of a thin to change, so well done

    be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2006-03-19 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good
    After reading this I got the feeling you were referring to how ones write can change and help a person in there Life
    I believe this message strongly
    This is one of the reasons I Love to read and comment on so many poems
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-02-19 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      <3! I liked this. It was very fast-paced and the rhyme and rhythm was natural and flowing. Two typos, however: trickory = trickery; and begining = beginning. Other than that... awesome! (great ending, too =^..^ ~Coraz
    | Posted on 2006-02-19 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]
      Finnneee fineee...I'll roleplay with you again, don't have to go all poetically mopey on me. Jeeze. -huffs and bit and stalks off to get a pen- Good greif, crazy bird.
    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]


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