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    Author: freeangel
    ASL Info:    22/female/bournemouth
    Elite Ratio:    3.59 - 87/117/110
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 1101
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 491



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       This is a slightly weird one i'm afraid, in any case, please let me know if you think it's crap or cool!


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    Experience of peace

    To lay in awe, the sight before.
    I float above my gaze of love.
    Your eyes of green so much unseen.
    Closed for the night to my delight.

    To say goodbye would make me cry,
    Too much has passed, to see the blast.
    Instead I set, some minutes yet
    Ere you will find whatís on my mind.

    For now you sleep before you weep.
    Iím over now,
    you
    wonít
    see
    how.




    Submitted on 2006-02-19 11:03:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i read this piece because i noticed that quite a few people (10) had viewed it and no one bothered to say anything, which is something that annoys me greatly. I thought that the idea behind the writing was great, but the format and the rhyme scheme really throw it off for me they take away from it because it is so random....the idea and the words are excellent, which leads me to say that this piece definately has a lot of potential, keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by morte | [ Reply to This ]


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