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    dots Submission Name: sorrydots
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    Author: sweet sorenity
    ASL Info:    24/f/ Ga
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 211/221/58
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
    Total Views: 759
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    why do you confine in me
    it dosnt make you free
    how can i help you
    if i myself dont know what to do

    dont you understand i have no direction in my life
    i can barely keep away from the knife
    dont get me rong im not suicidal
    im just not in the posission to be your idol

    im sorry if i lead you on
    my in my head im so far gone
    i tried i did
    but im just a kid

    i cant help but feel responisible for you life
    but i sware to god i could never be your wife
    friends i will promis but that is all
    i will be their when you call

    i try and try
    but you make me cry
    you make me wright the shit i do
    and its mostly because of you

    just recently you came to me
    i thought maby i could help you see
    but its impossible
    im not all to stable

    i just cant continue like this
    i can not accept your kiss
    im sorry my dear
    but what you want is what i fear




    Submitted on 2006-02-19 13:53:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is very interesting.What i get from the poem is someone asked you to marry them and you said no.And you just wanted to be friends with this guy but he wanted to be more.I can totally relate to that because the same thing happened to me.But this poem is not [censored] its really good.And i enjoyed reading it.You expressed yourself in a good way.Writing is the best thing for some people to do.Great job!
    | Posted on 2006-03-12 00:00:00 | by suicidal_chick | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm. interesting poem. It seem that there is someone who ..likes you? or looks up to you and you just cant give them what they want..Something like that. I liked it, it was expressive and ..well its a good thing to let your feelings out. Sometimes people just dont see.
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    | Posted on 2006-02-19 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]
      There were some mispelled words and words that were out of place. Overall this poem has the feelings but it isnt as thought out as it should be. This could be writen so much better if you just give your mind time to analize these thoughts into one overwhelming emotion. From there masterful writes can be concieved. I did like this though.
    | Posted on 2006-02-19 00:00:00 | by nasuka | [ Reply to This ]
      Sweet!(exscuse the lame pun on the name). Appologizing for whom you are, there's something i can relate to. First off it's not shyt! As a matter of fact it's damn near my favorite. IT shows a great deal of growth just in the expansion from beginning to end, and the ability to comfront it like that, is extremely commendable. Personally i feel everything happens for a reason. by people going to you for advice or what have you, it makes you take a look at yourself, and maybe theres something underlying there that you wouldn't have found other wise. I'm speaking from experience, also not to sound like your dad, but only you can blame yourself for what you do, hope your better, take care
    | Posted on 2006-03-11 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]


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